Title of the book: Where's that Vampire too?

Author: NushCreates 

Reviewer: Advaita.

Chapter to be reviewed: 20

Plot:

The story goes with  Alexandrya De Vendetta a teenage  vampire hunter and her meetings with a vampire named Paul and about her living with her  companions alien  Diana and vanishing of D and meeting a werewolf Tristan and finding her father and meeting Zoe and Lex and getting converted into werewolf.

Positive Aspect:

The Character of the story is unique. Another thing to be liked is  the first chapter starts with an introduction of Alexa. Grammer is pretty good according to a first book. The idea of including so many creatures is a nice approach as well but with one catch that would be discussed in next paragraph. You tried to describe events and that is appreciable. There is small loopholes which I will discuss on next section.

Negative aspects:

The first  bad point is the story revolves  mainly on Alexa and vampires but the other supernatural creatures like werewolf and aliens is getting  more limelight than the vampires and active involvement of the creatures in executives places them a picture of important characters, you could dedicate some chapters often which gives Alexa a major limelight. Secondly you used some vocabulary like we'd like which is quite informal and doesn't used like this in books, you could use it we had then it would be better.
Third point I would suggest is, when you start a mature scene then give a heading  like mature scene starts in bold and when it ends, the ending should be marked too so that when anyone is not comfortable with such parts they can skip and  break your chapters in paragraphs.

Last but most important is that your stories doesn't have proper flow like in first a incident starts but it doesn't end properly and sometimes a person appears suddenly for example  in first chapter Sarah gets afraid  and calls police and runs away but in later chapter 18 suddenly Sarah appears and also casually without any fear and also asks about alien D , it gets confusing for readers to understand. You have not cleared what happened what happened when Sarah complans or how she comes to know about D, you could clear by showing a Flashback and about sudden appearance of a character there her quite a places like in chapter one.
There are many places  where this mistake happens you can do something about it. The book is about dark sci fi so the cover if bit dark then it will be good.
It also lacks a bit in actions and darkness.

Overall Analysis:

Mistakes are there  but if hard work is done then book will be quite good.

(P.S _ Its reviwers own   thought. It can differ from  person to person and its a honest review no extra goodness is added)