Book name:  Ramayan: Untold Romance

Author:  lakshmila4ardi

Chapters reviewed: 20

Reviewer: Afreen

Plot:

The books revolve around the life of all 4 ramayan couples and their bonding with each other . This book starts after the sita swayamvar, Although in the original ramayan they got married immediately but in this one author doesn't make them married immediately and tries to shed light on how they fell in love, their cute confession , siblings cute fights and deep bonding between them and in this way plots goes ahead. Some other characters ( like meghnath and sulochana ) stories are also shown in parallel. 

Positive aspects:
 
The best thing about the Book is its simplicity. Book is simply filled with happiness and beautiful bonding of character with each other. I personally like the way you give weightage to each character of story. Urmila and lakshman's little squabble is one of the likeable things in the book. It's also has fair share of humor and little suspense which makes the reader grasped enough to read further. Bonding between siblings are shown in an exemplary way which is one of the plus points of the book. Although the way of writing was not professional yet this simple writing doesn't feel bad to read . Overall a good effort to write something different in a simple and beautiful way from normal ramayan fan fiction.

Negative aspects:

Beginning chapters are one of the biggest drawbacks of the story. When the story progresses after 5 chapters of the beginning, it feels good to read, but in the beginning it seems quite boring as if there is no plot in the story . This story feels completely different from ramayan. Many characters don't show their basic characteristics mentioned in the original ramayan which some people may not like. 

Many things in the story feel not important to discuss and also at some places plot holes are also visible. Vocabulary also needs to be improved a little bit. I suggest you to focus more on your writing style specially during the representations of flashback scenes. You can use different styles of writing for showing different scenes and also don't mix up everything in one paragh it doesn't look impressive at all... As a reader I sense an inconsistency in the pace. Sometimes it's a little fast ( especially in Meghnath and Sulochana cases) and most of the time it's really slow  and  I think u seriously need to work on it

 One thing more, generally the line is placed after the end of any scene so that the readers understand that the scene is over but I noticed you insert a line in the middle of scenes and that feels quite  unnecessary and confusing. 

Overall analysis:

This is a first book by the author,  despite of that the author has done a commendable job and it can be much better in future if she focus on some points mentioned above. Those people who like to read about simple stories of romance and bonding  will definitely like this effort.