Name of the Book: Love Over Salvation

Name of the Author: vampressXXX

Number of chapters: 14

Reviewer: Mixer

Plot known till now:

This is a time travel story from Kaliyug to Dwaparyug. It starts off with the wedding plan between the two protagonists Vedhika and Vasav but before their wedding Vasav dies due to a car crash and Vedhika is left alone. She goes by the seashore, Vasav's favourite spot and thinks about him when she is suddenly sucked into Dwapar Yug where Shalya, Maharaj of Madra spots her and takes her to the palace where she gets adopted by the Royal Family. She then meets Kunti and the twins and they take her to Hastinapur where she meets the Kuruvanshis and Yudishthir gets crowned as the Yuvraj of Hastinupar and then they travel to the Varnavat where the fire takes place and they go into hiding. 2 years pass and then the Draupadi swayamvar takes place and Vedhika meets Rukmini whilst she has dreams of Vasav. Draupadi gets split between the brothers and then they go to Panchal to get married when she spots Vasav. Really excited to read next.

Positive Aspects:

The story’s start off is absolutely congenial and gives the book an instant attraction. It gives the story the base, which is really important.

Second thing, The way the chapters are divided makes it enough to read per chapter but keeps the readers hooked to it. The use of simple but sophisticated language makes it even better and much easier for the readers to understand and connect with.

Another aspect of the story is the melancholy of Vedhika, the sadness of her fiance’s death haunts her for a long time and not many books show that, getting over a death of a beloved is harder than it looks.

The protagonist is very well portrayed and each aspect has been covered really well.
Coming to the plot of the book. This plot is one of the unique plots that a reader would have ever come through in this section of Mythology, dwelling not one but two characters is very different and justify the Title as well. The plot has a continuity but there are a few plot holes which will be covered in the later period.

Another thing observed is simplicity and the bonding of the relations between two characters, connections and the portrayal of them is a key aspect and it has been very well covered.

A love triangle is starting to show at some point in the story and the way this has been brought in also gives an unique taste to it.

Negative Aspects:

Every single writer faces it. Grammar issues. They are very prominent in the book, having an editor who would help the author edit them would solve this aspect.

Plot holes are something that have also been found in the story, such as how Rukmini Mata was present in the temple when Krishna was not present nor do the readers get to see that part of the story, try to eliminate them.

Another thing is about the use of vocabulary and feelings, there is a lack of the feelings in the book to be honest. The simplicity of the words is a huge plus point but also, it is really important to improve the vocabulary as the author goes more into the book. Instead of putting up multiple pictures of the flowers or people, the author must try their best to put the description in words, that will  make the readers think more and explore their imaginative side as well.

One thing that makes the story lose its continuity is putting the translations right beside the story. Instead of putting the translations next to the line, the author could create a dictionary for every chapter in the top or bottom and put it there, hence it does not prevent the flow of the story

Also, try to use more pronouns, Example in the first chapter, there are a lot of “The house”; “Vedhika” etc. Try to minimise it and get to a stage where pronouns are being used.

As previously stated, try to use more emotions, for example instead of
“Vedika! Come downstairs!” shouted Geeta
The author could do
“Vedhika! Come downstairs!” Shouted a very melodious/strict voice (however the author wishes to use) which belonged to her mother, Geeta xyz (the surname)

Trying to cover these must the author’s primary focus must be to correct the grammar and trying to insert emotions and feelings into the book whilst introducing more description parts into the story.

Overall Analysis:

The book has got its charm and has a very good potential to do well in the genre. Emotions and scenes in a descriptive manner will enhance the book even more.The review is just a critical analysis of the work and shall be taken in a sporting way. All the best for your future and current projects.