Title: Unknown enemy

Author: nope77755464

Summary:

It all starts at Beacon Hills......The pack come back at their city only to find that people are dying not so naturally. More secrets are found along the way. How are they going to get through them?

Rating: 2

Review:

Firstly, let's begin with the cover, it's a clear photo which is nice and pleasing to look at. However, it lacks the author's name and the title. Maybe look for a designer that can help with that? The first impression is important to any reader. The summary needs some work as well, what are the stakes? Who are the main characters? A tip; use active sentences as you've used in 'It all starts at Beacon Hills'.

Regarding the story, especially the first two chapters lack proper punctuation between the dialog and description. Although, that can be fixed with a quick edit over the chapters. Adding some descriptions will help the story greatly. Use of italics and bold are exessive and I advise using it sparingly.

It's often unnecessary jump between point of view in the chapters -- if you really need to change the point of view make a new chapter and use it there. Changing between so many point of views in chapters isn't advises and can make a reader dizzy about the scene you're writing.

Good luck with your future endeavors!

~Jo