Recommended by: Yours truly

Author: by starrykaspbrak 

Synopsis:

SUPERNATURAL | in which the daughter of an archangel finds herself travelling with some unexpected companions

Rating: 3/5

Review:

Please note this story is in progress and as of this review date (2/9/18) has not been updated since November 2017.

Since I seemed to have an easier time listing pros and cons I'll do that format again.

Pros:

*The MC's name - As the small description tells, we are following the story of one Orabelle, a daughter of an archangel (no this is not a spoiler it is literally in the description, guys). Curious to know what her name means? You'll find out first chapter.

P.S. that is Orabelle as she gets older.

*Lack of Winchesters - before anyone disagrees, a lot of fanfics (I am also guilty of this as well) throw in the Winchesters pretty early on into the story. This fic doesn't do that. It gives you room to breathe before Orabelle transitions into the plot of Supernatural. Expect to meet them about chapter 4.

*Cover - simple, but works.

Cons:

*Minor spelling mistakes - these can be easily corrected with some thorough editing.

*Story description - it's just a peeve of mine that it's too short, so don't mind this too much.

*Overall description - it seems a little lacking. We get none on Sam and Dean. I get it, we all know that the Winchesters are adorable and frightening and we all have a preference and we've seen them age in the 13 seasons of the show (gods when you see them as babies...), but for story purposes you gotta describe them. Not overly describe them, but just enough for readers to envision them. This goes for characters, settings, etc. You want to paint just enough of a picture for your readers; don't drown them with every painstaking detail (if you've read any Twilight books you'll understand how much detail you really read against plot and dialogue).

*Abrupt transition/jarring pace  - this might be just me, but if Orabelle is with the Winchesters, we have no idea how they met. Now, maybe this gets explained later (as far as I've read, this has not been explained), but there's no...connection. We go from her last time in Heaven to bam 5x1. We get no real backstory as to how she came to be with Sam and Dean, or why. I'm missing that piece.

I know that we take certain liberties with fanfics, but building your MC's relationships with canon characters starts from the ground up. Readers want to see those relationships form (whether or not they want to ship pairings later). 

Adding on to that, it seems like the author is just picking out which pieces they want Orabelle in. While I can relate to that, there's just...there's no transition. It almost feels like Orabelle might be an insert to the plot with no real separate journey from the Winchesters.

*Difficulty liking Orabelle - she seems one dimensional...just like she's there. I want to like her. I did in the beginning. It's not that she's got personality that turns people away, I just...I want to be able to like her. I want to relate to her. I want to root for her. I want to sympathize with her, I want to be able to want to hug her and protect her from all evil. Kinda see where I'm going here?

There are things that can be improved here. Whether or not you choose to do so, that's up to you. I don't dictate your writing; nobody does except for you. You do what you feel is best for your story.