Teen Fiction Results
Time for the results! Without further ado, here they are for Teen Fiction! Thank you, Mila_333, for your hard work on these awards. Contestants, please check out their shout-out chapter-it has their username in the chapter title-if you haven't done so already. They deserve some appreciation :).
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Genre Results
🌻Third Place🌻
Username - kinalhariya
Book Title - New Beginnings
Score - 83.5/100
Review -
Title
Basically, the title couldn't get any more accurate. It might not be 100% attractive as a title but it sure sounds quite promising! It definitely matches the plot.
Cover
The cover is really nice and refreshing, totally matching the plot, title and blurb. I really like the font style and font size you've used for the title. The author name is well-placed and clearly visible. The question in the middle is also neatly placed.
Blurb
I like how the blurb is short but up to the point. It provides the necessary information, but it does lack some interesting elements that will attract readers to read the book.
Originality
The story is quite unique in its own way. The transition from the city to the small town was an interesting idea. The plot was also not really common, except for some particular scenes.
Grammar
I have noticed some grammar issues. They are nothing too major but some of them were found to be repetitive mistakes. For example, at many places, "it's" was used instead of "its." I came across some typos and verb tenses wrongly applied.
Moreover, I took cognizance of the aspect you mentioned in the first chapter about the punctuation marks being after the inverted comma. However, I still considered the part on whether the punctuation marks are right or not, regardless of whether they are before or after the inverted comma. Hence, at some places where a full stop is required, you've wrongly inserted a comma. I suggest you do some minor editing and you'll be good to go!
Plot
The plot was enjoyable. I like the way the story began and hence the prologue. I loved the awkwardness portrayed when Trisha first entered the twins' house. It was a natural scene and very realistic. However, the part where she's being informed about her parents death could be revised since the uncle's behavior is not really justifiable. It also seems really abrupt the way he shouted since this was only the first time he said the news out aloud. Moreover, I would have much appreciated a nice description of the aunt's house rather than being provided with only a picture. Inserting the picture's fine, but it would be better with some good description of the house. The scenes that follow afterwards were really realistic and the way of describing the events happening was really enjoyable. However, one thing that I've noticed is the slow pacing of the plot. I totally agree that the story is all about the new beginning of the female protagonist's life, hence the evolution is mandatory to match the content. However, on another note, the slow pacing was also quite enjoyable since as I said above, the scenes have been well implemented. Additionally, there was one scene I felt was a bit unnecessary and in a kind of way, it hindered the pacing of the plot. That was when the female protagonist had to babysit Sia. The bond between Sia and Trisha had already been witnessed by readers at the beginning of the story itself and adding the babysitting part got repetitive in some kind of way. Moreover, the twist in regard to Rishi's sexuality was nice and the scenes unfolding later was quite commendable.
Writing Style
Your writing style is clean, neat and on-point. It definitely aids in dispensing a nice and enjoyable read. You have been successful in providing a voice to the characters most of the time. However, I feel you can definitely enhance your writing style a bit more, or more likely intensifying it. There was a certain gravity lacking when the female protagonist got the dreadful news of her parents' death and this has to do with your writing style. I suggest you try going to greater lengths to explain the emotions of the characters.
Characters
The female protagonist's character is well-built and somewhat admirable. She really has patience and determination to move forward. She is definitely built strong and has a warm personality. Her aunt's character was also really good and I definitely love the way she has brought up her sons. Coming to the twins now, I have to say I loved the way their mom raised them and the contrast in their personality was also really nice and fun.
🌻Second Place🌻
Username - ajwoodward
Book Title - My Heart's in Alabama
Score - 88.5/100
Review -
Title
The title definitely fits the story, and it sounds pleasant and professional when you read it aloud. As such, it does perks up the reader's interest towards the story.
Cover
The cover is also nice and matches the plot. I really like the font size and font style you used to write the title. The cover entails this fresh look of teen fiction. However, I would suggest writing your-the author's-name at the bottom of the cover to have a more presentable look.
Blurb
The blurb is crystal clear on the story's content, and it definitely reflects what you have written in the story. I also like the way you have described the protagonist's relationship in the blurb itself. It is alluring, entertaining and sounds promising.
Originality
The most unique thing about the story is the prologue. I have never come across any story that first gives a background for the protagonist's parents and here it plays such an important role. Moreover, I love how you covered the relationships among the people in the town. It made the story appear less cliche and made it stand out, purely exuding fresh vibes.
Grammar
There was absolutely no problem with grammar. There has been the correct use of punctuation marks. Tenses have been correctly conjugated. Sentence structure was also good. Overall, there is no issue with grammar.
Character
The characters are really entertaining and I loved their relationships with each other. The only character I didn't quite understand was the male protagonist's mother. I hope the truth will be revealed at a later stage. On the other hand, the connection between the two main leads was enjoyable, fun and refreshing. I love how there wasn't any toxicity involved. On the other hand, I really admire the relationship between the male protagonist's father and himself. They had this kind of bond which was so warm and cherishable. I hope for some character development for the male protagonist regarding his behaviour and thoughts towards his mother. I think his behaviour is very well much justified but I believe the father and son both need a good explanation.
Plot
I absolutely loved the plot, and as mentioned above, the prologue was the best part in this book. It was something absolutely unique and uncommon. You have definitely planned all the different aspects of the story and I have to praise you for the creativity and uniqueness. The way you have described the different happening in the story was also commendable. As a reader, I was able to visualize the different scenes going on. The only thing I noticed a bit off for me was the pacing of the story. I was hoping for an eventful plot when the story began. Instead, I found the story to be a bit slow-paced. It is not a major issue but I was hoping to see things happen a bit more quickly.
Writing Style
Your writing style is definitely effortless, neat, precise, concise and on-point. You were successfully able to give the characters their individual voices. The way you expressed each of the character's thoughts definitely made an impact on me as a reader as I was surely able to connect with the plot and the characters. I could understand every character and their way of doing things because of the way you were conveying their point of views.
🌻First Place🌻
Username - annkreeves
Book Title - Heart of Sparrow
Score - 92.5/100
Review -
Title
The title fully corresponds to the story, but I could not give a five out of five since I believe it is not fully enticing to lure readers. A title should be attractive and basically the initial hook and let's just say I didn't grab your book first from my list. If you are intent in keeping the title, then I at least suggest you put it as such: "The Heart of Sparrow."
Cover
The cover would be extremely nice if there weren't that many stickers on it. They kind of hinder the purpose and attractiveness of the cover. I can't really tell you to remove the stickers since they are obviously placed on merit but again, it defeats the purpose of the elements on the cover. Regardless, I really loved the wings and the heart, it makes full sense why they are there. I also love the rich and intense background, totally fitting to the plot.
Blurb
The blurb is really good and provides readers with all the details that make the story appear interesting and entertaining. There's also an element of mystery in the end with the questions.
Originality
I am honestly thrilled by the contents in the story and I loved how you brought so many supernatural beings in one story combined. It made the story a full package of what readers would want, though most importantly, added to the originality. This could be by far one of the most unique pieces I've ever read. So, hats off!
Grammar
I only noticed minor grammatical issues here and there but nothing serious. For example, punctuation marks were missing at some places but only some slight editing would be enough.
Character
Your characters have been very much enjoyable. Only thing I would like to mention is the development of the female protagonist. I totally understand the phase she went through when the truth came in front of her and she had a certain reaction. However, I'd like to see her grow more maturely where she deals with things more responsibly. For example, meeting with Booker was a big NO but she still risked her life and for a really stupid reason. Again, I would say I understand her perspective. Also, I would also like to see her opening her eyes a bit before blatantly trusting people. As far as the male protagonist is concerned, the mysterious side of him was really killing me but it was as much appreciated as the element of intrigue was there and that is exactly what is needed in the story.
Plot
The prelude was fascinating. It's honestly quite rare to find a book with such a full package. The plot was totally fun, mysterious, sassy and mostly addictive. It's like I couldn't wait to know what would happen next. And I can say this plot has been arranged quite maturely and with much precision. I'm really all praise for it. You did a great job narrating each and every individual scene.
Writing Style
You truly have an awesome writing style. The amazing voice the story has totally outweighs the very minor grammar issue. I absolutely love how the characters have such a unique voice and stand out individually. Some of the analogies were really good. You also provided a really nice description, be it regarding the places in the story or the emotions of the characters.
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