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1. THE MOST CLICHE QUESTION by
Cover/title : (8/10)
The cover is good but not very eye-catching. I would suggest you to try something more eligible.
The title is apt. It matches with your poem perfectly.
The flow of words : (13.5/15)
Some stanzas losses the fluidity but overall it's meaningful, that's what matter the most.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary : (14/15)
The grammar and spelling are good, I don't find any issues. The vocabulary is not too hard to understand and it's a good point. However, I think except for the "ear piercing's wound" it sounds better if use "ear piercing wound"
Writing style : (12/15)
A few changes will be good. I've noticed you put the question marks into the wrong places and leave were important with this "..."
"Is it the belief
That makes me believe?" (There should be a question mark)
The lines you've put in the middle and lastly "from all other hardships out there?" isn't suiting and when we read it, it seems difficult to understand.
"Being the most calm and content?" this line needs a question mark rather than "eyes of the civilization"
Poetic devices : (13/15)
Emotions : (9.5/10)
The emotions well flow. I like how you've mentioned different types of things to ask what is love.
Originally : (9/10)
Enjoyment : (8/10)
Except for the little confusing lines, overall I had fun reading it. Keep it up.
Total : (87/100)
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2. LOVE WINGS by
PriscillaYiadom4
Cover/title : (9/10)
The cover is pretty. The title is apt.
The flow of words : (12/15)
The flow was smooth from the first but the last Stanzas lost track.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary : (14/15)
One spelling mistake, it will be Angels except for Angeles.
"Love wings always on the beach kissing"
It'll sound better.
"Love wings are always on the beach, kissing"
Writing style : (11/15)
The writing is good enough. However, some lack of words make it confusing.
"The angels come and go when they're needed or not needed" it sounds better in this way,
"The Angels come and go whether they're needed or not needed"
"Love wings, you're here to stay"
"Love wings, will you stay?" It clarifies your emotion.
"Love wings always on the beach kissing" this line seems a bit confusing to me. Means how come love wings are always on the beach? Personally, I can't catch the inner meaning of it.
Poetic devices : (12.5/15)
Emotions : (8/10)
The emotions are well played. It gives us the newly blossom love vibe.
Originality : (8.5/10)
Enjoyment : (8.5/10)
This is a peaceful poem. Love your work. Keep it up.
Total : (83.5/100)
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3. MY KING by
TSAsimplicity1
Cover/title: 8/10
The title is fine. It would be good if you mention the "king" word anywhere in your poem as readers will be clueless if it's royal or a general love poem. However, the cover picture is a little hazy, but it's unique and suitable for your poem.
The flow of words: 13.5/15
The fluidity is smooth. The "only you" in every stanza gives it a rhythmic vibe.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 14/15
The grammar is perfect, I won't find any flaws. A little vocabulary improvement is needed.
Writing style: 13/15
"...turning its radiance from silver to love pink," instead of the come you can use this '-' or simply a full stop, so the line won't seem too long and boring compared to other stanzas.
"You have become my life, my laughter, my wet eyes, my fetish..." This stanza sounds cliché and kind of ruins the atmosphere. Readers might find it boring to read many words after words. You can use them with matching words like this-
"You've become my life,
the ray of hope in my wet eyes.
You've become my laughter,
my day and night."
Poetic devices: 13.5/15
Emotions: 10/10
The emotions are well played. It really hooked me in at the very first line! It shows us the deep passion in the lover's heart.
Originality: 8/10
Enjoyment: 8.5/10
I enjoyed reading it. Except for a few lines which ruined the pace.
Total: 88.5/100
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4. THE LOVE LIKE OUR ANCESTORS BY FernGoldenOfGale
Cover/title: 10/10
The cover is pretty aesthetic and perfectly matches the title.
The flow of words: 14/15
I like it how you put the exact words to convey the meaning of the poem rather than giving useless words to match the rhythm.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 14.5/15
Your vocabulary is splendid! Keep it up.
Writing style: 14/15
I like your writing style. Instead of haphazard stanzas, you put single lines and it becomes easier for readers to understand and dip right through your poem.
Poetic devices: 13/15
Emotions: 9/10
I can feel the emotions in your poem, flowing through every line.
Originality: 8/10
Enjoyment: 10/10
Total: 92.5/100
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5. THE BACK OF MY MATHS NOTEBOOK BYpapersxpen
Cover/title: 8/10
The title is nice and gives us the vibe of what exactly it is. The cover is also good but I would recommend using a more detailed picture with a less small font.
The flow of words: 13/15
The fluidity of words is well. It'll be more rhythmic if you put some synonyms.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 12.8/15
Writing style: 14/15
Poetic devices: 13.6/15
Emotions: 10/10
I can feel the longing for the teen lovers for ego. It seems that they're both in love but the boy can't accept it. It's so heart-touching.
Originality: 9/10
Enjoyment: 9.7/10
Though I don't like maths, your use of complex numbers and statistics in the poem nearly takes my breath away. Keep it up.
Total: 90.1/100
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6. SOPORIFIC (iv) BY
__morosis
Cover/title: 6/10
The cover needs improvement. It's too simple and won't catch the attention. The title is good.
The flow of words: 14.7/15
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 13/15
You need to improve your vocabulary and instead of using direct words, you can put the nearest meanings so it will look more authentic.
Writing style: 14/15
I personally like to read line-by-line poems instead of stanzas. We can easily understand the inner meaning of it without looking for much.
Poetic devices: 12/15
Emotions: 10/10
This is so heart-touching and I feel the pain in your lines. I just love it!
Originality: 7/10
Enjoyment: 9.5/10
Total: 86.2/100
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7. THE STORY OF MUSES BY
goldencinquains
Cover/title: 8/10
The cover is pretty much aesthetic. However, I suggest keeping the title in middle in a bold font and dark color as I found it difficult at first to read. The title is apt.
The flow of words: 13.5/15
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 14/15
Your vocabulary is quite nice. Try to improve it more.
Writing style: 13/15
Your writing style is unique. Some wrong choices of words cut the fluidity but it's not a major problem.
Poetic devices: 12.7/15
Emotions: 8/10
Some lines are confusing but overall the concept is very nice with the emotions well put together.
Originality: 10/10
Enjoyment: 7.7/10
I really enjoyed reading this. You have a unique sense of taste.
Total: 86.9/100
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8. I'LL LET YOU LEAVE THE MARK
BY -bites
Cover/title: 8/10
The cover is so gorgeous. It gives us the pretty vibe of hollowness, your poems try to ensure. The title is also good.
The flow of words: 13.5/15
The fluidity of words is portraying very uniquely without cutting off the emotions with the unusual matching synonyms. I love the last three stanza of yours. It really gives me goosebumps.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 15/15
I really couldn't find any mistake. It was well written. Your vocabulary is quite nice.
Writing style: 13/15
The first stanza would be better according to me, as you've not completed the sentence structure and leave it vaguely. It's leave a question mark as to what.
Poetic devices: 12/15
Emotions: 9.7/10
The emotions is intriguing. I love how the girl (most probably abused by the society) seeks for some love and comfort. The harsh reality helps her to gain trust issues but still she's fighting.
Originality: 9/10
Enjoyment: 8.7/10
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this.
Total: 88.9/100
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9. MOSAICKED FEELINGS BY
TessaYoung5
Cover/title: 8/10
Cover is pretty good. Title is very unique and apt for the theme of the poem.
The flow of words: 14/15
The words choosing and rhyming is splendid. The words fit one after another line so amazingly.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 13/15
I just love your vocabulary. It's too good. But in few areas I think you should change the line as below,
"One wrong move and you *get to start from scratch again"
"A feeling *happen by eyes but only felt through heartbeats"
"A sad song *is all it *is, transitioning to a romantic elegy"
Writing style: 14.7/15
The writing is so deep and each and every line portraying the emotions you wanted to put in. Keep it up.
Poetic devices: 15/15
Emotions: 10/10
Originality: 10/10
Enjoyment: 10/10
Total: 94.7/100
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10. SECRET ADMIRER BY
a_friendforever
Cover/title: 8/10
The cover is too vibrant for the aesthetic beauty of the poetry. Title is apt. I love it.
The flow of words: 14/15
The fluidity of your words is what am mesmerized of. One after another your detailed description catches my heart.
Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 13/15
Vocabulary can be improved. Although in the first stanza it should be "your fingers *are long and thin" not and, i think.
I found a little typing error,
"Stands of hair *settle on your face"
Writing style: 13.9/15
Your writing is amazing, there's no argue. But one thing, the poem is too big and detailed for the reader to keep up. I suggest not to use so many tiny things and keep it as short as possible with few words.
Poetic devices: 14/15
Emotions: 10/10
Originality: 8/10
Enjoyment: 10/10
Total: 90.9/100
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FIRST POSITION
Mosaicked Feelings
TessaYoung5
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SECOND POSITION
The Love like our Ancestors
FernGoldenOfGale
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THIRD POSITION
Secret Admirer
a_friendforever
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JUDGED BY
Tuneofhisflute
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