Author: srishtiprasad12
Book Name: Something Unexpected
Number of Chapters:10
Genre: Fanfiction, Comedy, Mystery

First Impression:Messy!

Cover: Cover needs improvement. Since story has many characters it looks messy. Its just a collage of different pictures which won't attract readers. I suggest you to order a cover from any cover shop.

Title:"Something Unexpected" is not a very attractive title.You can add this phrase in the blurb but it doesn't fit as a title.Change the title if possible.

Blurb:Blurb is an important part of a story and needs to be interesting. You should surely work on the blurb and add some interesting dialogues or a part of scene.

Grammar and Writing Style:There are grammatical errors and even spelling mistakes. You need to edit them as soon as possible.
Coming to writing style you can change the way you are writing dialogues.Avoid using short forms.
What you write is:
Shreya:Wo kl aa jayegi to pata chal jayega

Go for this:
"Wo kal aa jayegi to pata chal jayega",said Shreya.

Plot:Plot is good.Pace is fine.

Character Development: Character development is fine.You can add character sketch as well.

Suggestions:
•Change the cover.
•Change the title if possible.
•Make the blurb more intriguing.
•Edit your book as soon as possible.
•You can add character sketch in the starting for the new readers.It will help.
•Add translation to dialogues in Hindi to attract more readers (non-hindi readers)

On an overall basis it's a good story a few changes and editing can make it better.Personally I am a CID fan so I enjoyed reading it.

Thank You for choosing my shop!
I hope you grow and shine✨

~KristinAnne ❤️