Reviewer- cwang1

Pros:

I liked how the text was easily readable in the cover, and your title was also very mysterious, and fit the cover image.

The cover image gave me some mystical vibes, as did your title.

I did like the content of your blurb. You ended it on a very interesting note, and it really left a reader hanging.

I liked the vagueness in the blurb and also the vivid description.

I liked how you had a lot of good vocabulary that really fit the scene.

You were able to really convey the action and scenery through your writing, so great job on that!

I liked how your sentence structure really varied, something that really adds to the book.

I thought that your plot was really intriguing, and I especially liked how you ended your chapters. They left the reader on a sort of cliffhanger and really left the reader hanging.

Cons:

I noticed that some of your cover was cut off. I'm pretty sure this wasn't intentional, since you don't really want to have part of your cover cut off. I would recommend making your cover in an app like Canva with the dimensions 512 x 800 pixels, as that is the Wattpad cover size.

I did notice that you did have some grammatical and capitalization errors in your blurb. For example, you did capitalize the name 'Saffron' at the beginning. I would just recommend going back and checking over your writing, especially your blurb, for mistakes like this.

Some of your sentences do tend to be on the longer side, so I would recommend breaking some of them up for clarity.

I did see some grammatical and capitalization mistakes, so I would recommend going back and checking it.

I think part of the reason is because you had some extra clauses that were not grammatically correct when added to the main clause, so I would recommend taking those out and making a new sentence out of them.

I would also recommend making the flow between chapters a little less confusing. I did get really confused when I transitioned from chapter to chapter, so I would suggest that you go back and extend each chapter so that it makes more sense.