Reviewer: cwang1

Pros:

Your cover was amazing! I liked how the title was nice and clear and easy to see.

I really liked how you used your paragraph structure to help to emphasize certain sentences. When there were funny sentences or important ones, you put them on a different line, which I think is very helpful.

I really liked how you gave the readers insight into the characters' thoughts. This definitely helped to add to the funny mood of your story and made it more enjoyable.

I really liked your dialogue tags. These made the dialogue more fun to read and it definitely helped to develop your characters more.

Cons:

Your blurb was a bit long and messy. I would recommend reorganizing it a little bit. Since your blurb seemed to almost be in one big paragraph, it made it really hard to read the whole thing. I would recommend putting another return between the paragraphs to give the reader some time to process the information.

I would recommend perhaps using some more unique vocabulary words. Your vocabulary was pretty basic, so maybe you could try finding synonyms for some of the words that you already have.

Your chapters are a bit long, at least for Wattpad. Usually, chapters should be about 1000-2000 words, at least on Wattpad. If you are thinking of getting your book published, then it doesn't really matter as authors complete control over chapter length. However, on Wattpad, some readers do get bored if your chapters are too long.