*The picture above is the cabin layout, and there is a LONG but VERY IMPORTANT author's note at the bottom.  Hope you enjoy the chapter!*

*This chapter got long, sorry.  You're not obligated to read parts that don't have your character in them (but you can if you want to of course)*

The door swung open, and slammed into the wall behind it with a bang. "Rise and shine!" said a cheerful voice, as light streamed into the room, illuminating the sleep-deprived teenage zombies within.

"Somebody help me find the snooze button on the sun," mumbled Luna, pressing her pillow over her head.

"Not my fault you were watching prank videos at three last night," said Scar, amused, climbing out of bed.

"When they said we got up at six thirty I assumed they were joking," muttered Luna.

"If it helps, I could tip the bunk bed over," offered Ricon, sitting up in his own.

"Yeah, that's a hard pass from me," yawned Luna, rolling over and accidentally falling out and slamming onto the floor. "Agh, these camp beds are tiny!"

"Watch it, you almost hit me!" complained Ari, moving around on the mat they'd dragged onto the floor.

"Once you're all ready head down to the mess hall," instructed the voice by the door. It belonged to Zana, the group's camp guide. "See you there!" The door creaked shut.

Slowly, everyone was waking up. In the back corner, Agi was sitting up and rubbing the fog off of his glasses, while below him, Pierre's sleeping bag was showing signs of life. Lei woke up easily, sliding out of bed, and almost stepping on Anya, who was climbing out at just the same time. Ricon woke up quickly, and climbed out of bed, and Gavin in fact had already been awake, reading quietly with the light from the window. Santiago yawned loudly, but woke up quickly. Virginia was the second to last to ooze out of bed. Finally, everyone was up except Travis, whose mess of sleeping bag and blankets had yet to show any sign of being vaguely alive.

Candon poked him. "Come on, we've got to get up."

"Go away."

Virginia glared. "If he's going to make us late, we may as well leave."

Ari scrolled through their phone. "Hold on, I'm looking for a good bugle noise."

"Dude," said Candon, poking him again.

"Let's all poke Travis until he gets up," grinned Ricon poking him. Ari laughed and started doing the same.

"Okay! Okay! Fine!" Travis materialized out of the sleeping bad. "I'm awake! Let's go!" He marched straight out of the cabin.

Anya looked thoughtful. "Isn't he going to change out of his PJs?"

Travis marched back into the room.

Ten minutes later, the thirteen of them walked into the dinning hall. "Ooh, something smells good," said Scar, looking over at the pancakes. After dropping their backpacks at the designated table for cabin 12, they got in line, got pancakes, and filed back over to the main table.

"It bothers me that these pancakes are good," said Pierre, shoveling some into his mouth.

"Come again?" frowned Candon.

"Think about it," started Pierre. "School lunches are terrible. They're like, absolutely disgusting."

Scar was nodding. "Preach, brother."

"And they have access to all kinds of resources. These pancakes they make in a ten-foot kitchen in the middle of the woods with no running water. If they're this good, that means that the school lunch people just aren't even trying."

"You know," said Candon, "I wasn't expecting that to make sense, but it did. Well done, sir." Pierre smiled.

"So, what brings all of you here?" asked Luna, sitting down with her plateful of pancakes.

Gavin blinked. "Breakfast?"

Luna snorted. "I meant the summer camp. Like, why are you all coming here?"

"Wanted to be somewhere different," said Scar. "Summers at home were getting old."

"My dad kind of forced me," admitted Pierre. "I've never been to a camp before."

"I wasn't forced, but it was my parent's idea," said Lei quietly.

"Mine as well," nodded Gavin.

"This was my aunt's idea," nodded Candon.

Scar looked around. "Jeez, is anyone here because they felt like it?"

"I am," said Anya with a smile. "I heard this camp has a great arts and crafts program. I've been wanting to learn some new mediums."

"Oh you're an artist?" asked Candon. "That's pretty cool."

Anya looked down a little. "Well, just an amateur."

The rest of the group was arriving and sitting down. Pierre looked around, considering everyone. Next to him was Candon, who certainly seemed friendly. He could be a friend. Scar Gavin Anya Lei and Luna all seemed nice as well. Nearby was Virginia, eating her food while reading a thick book and ignoring everyone. Next to her, Travis seemed to be doing the same thing, only without the book. Furthur down the table, Ari and Ricon were sitting next to each other, talking quickly, and laughing, those two had hit if off quickly. Santiago was talking and laughing with them as well. Opposite them was Agi, eating his food silently. Agi and Ari looked enough alike that Pierre had originally assumed they were siblings, but that couldn't be the case. Their last names were different and they'd barely spoken a word to each other during the past day. Agi had barely spoken a word to anyone.

"Oh hey, here's the schedual for the day," said Ari's voice, and Pierre snapped back to the present.

"We have archery tomorrow!" grinned Santiago, peering over Ari's shoulder.

Ari looked over the list. "Ugh, we have swimming first... then we're taking a nature hike."

"Oh cool, where are we going?" asked Scar, looking at the schedual.

Ari shrugged. "We're supposed to plan the route ourselves."

"I can do that during the swimming block," offered Agi.

"Yeah, great," nodded Ari, absently. "Make it a long one, it takes up lots of the afternoon."

"I wonder why they call it a nature hike," frowned Scar. "I mean, where else were we going to go? Take laps around the mess hall for an hour?"

"Heh, facts," chuckled Luna.

After breakfast, everyone grabbed their swimming stuff and ran down to the lake. "C'mon, let's go to the deep end," said Ricon to Ari.

Ari coughed. "Actually, I'm going to stay out of the water for this one."

"Aw, how come?" pouted Ricon.

"Not a huge fan of swimming," admitted Ari.

"Alright," shrugged Ricon, jumping into the lake, touching the bottom, and then resurfacing. "Hey, truth or dare?"

"Dare," said Ari immediately. "As long as it's not jumping in the lake."

"Hm," said Ricon. "Okay, I dare you to go around and drop fake pick-up lines on people."

Ari snorted. "How does that work?"

"You act like you're going to flirt with them and then insult them."

"Oh, yeah, sure," said Ari, wandering back down the dock. "Have fun swimming," they said, but Ricon was already gone. Ari glanced to the side, where there was a volleyball game going on. The only two campers they recognized were Scar and Travis, and Travis was closer. "Hey Travis!" Ari called. "Wanna help me with a dare?"

"What dare?" said Travis, looking over.

"Hey there," winked Ari. "Are you the embodiment of swimming? Because I really hate you."

"Hey are you the legal document that made me come to this dumb summer camp?" shot back Travis. "Because I'd really like to stab you in the face."

Ari snorted. "Legal documents don't have faces."

"Fuck off," said Travis, going back to the game.

Ari glanced around. Nobody else was really close to the dock, so maybe that was it for the dare... no, they spotted Agi sitting in the shade under a picnic table, going over the map. Right, Agi, the silent intimidating one. Ari jogged over. "Agi, help me with a dare."

"Uh, how?" said Agi, looking up hesitantly.

"Hey there," winked Ari. "Are you the embodiment of swimming? Because I really hate you."

"Huh—? Oh I see. Well are you...uh..." fumbled Agi, "A... a cat? Because... wait, no," he frowned, "I like cats..."

Ari glanced around. "Any of the counsellors looking over here?"

"Uhm... no," said Agi, slightly suspicious.

Ari put her backpack on the table and zipped it open. A cat's head poked out and hissed at Agi.

Agi jumped about six feet in the air. "Holy crap!"

"His name's Marco Polo," grinned Ari, petting him.

"You have a friggin cat in your backpack?!?"

"You don't?"

Agi began petting his head. "He's so soft."

Ari laughed, and looked at the map on the table. "I snuck him into camp. How's the route planning going?"

"Good," said Agi absently, stroking Marco Polo's head, and holding one of his paws. "I was thinking we go on this loop here," he pointed. He'd been thinking of that one because it was about five miles long, and should take about the amount of time alotted for it if they took a long break for lunch. "What do you think?"

"Huh, cool," nodded Ari, slidding into a seat next to him. "Let's add this little loop here though, because then we go by the pond. Ponds are cool."

"Oh yeah, good idea," said Agi, scribbling out his pencil marks, and then returning to petting Marco Polo. "You sneak cats into camp often?"

"First time," said Ari, "But I plan to make a habit of it. Want help with the route planning?"

"Yeah, course," smiled Agi, scooting over on the bench.

Meanwhile in the lake, people were playing an entirely different kind of marco polo. "Marco!" yelled Luna.

"Polo!" yelled Candon, Scar, Santiago, Ricon, Pierre, and Anya. Anya sounded closest, so it was her that Luna dove for. Letting out a shriek of laughter, Anya dove out of the way, and swam behind Luna, poking her on the shoulder. "You fiend!" exclaimed Luna, kicking off towards Anya again. "Marco!"

"Polo!"

"Marco!"

"Polo!" This time it was Pierre Luna dove for, but she missed again. "Marco!"

"Polo!"

Luna swam after Santiago's voice. Ricon swam up behind her and poked her, diving quickly down before she could spin around. "Marco!"

"Polo!" Ricon's voice was right behind her, but he resubmerged just as her hands reached out. As she slowed down, he tapped her on the back again.

"Alright you're asking for it," grinned Luna. "Marco!"

"Polo!" called everyone. Luna dove at Ricon, but he swam backwards.

This is calling for a slightly more subtle approach, Luna thought to herself. "Marco!" she yelled.

"Polo!" everyone yelled back. This time, however, instead of diving after someone, Luna disappeared straight down.

"Um, where is she?" peered Candon.

Gavin ducked underwater briefly before reappearing. "I can't see her at all, the water's too dark."

Ricon frowned. "Maybe she AH FU—" Ricon cut off as he disappeared underwater. Before anyone had a chance to worry, both he and Luna reappeared, Luna laughing hysterically.

"Nice one, you really got me," grinned Ricon.

"That's what you get," she said, sticking her tongue out. "Ricon's it!" Luna yanked off the blindfold and passed it to him. Ricon tied it on.

Scar swam up to Gavin, as Ricon chased Anya. "Hey, wanna help me sacrifice Candon?"

Gavin looked up cautiously. "Uh, well, how does that work?"

"We grab his arms and sacrifice him to Ricon," grinned Scar.

"Is he going to be mad?" asked Gavin.

Scar shook her head. "Doubt it, he seems like he wouldn't care. Wanna help?"

"Well... alright," smiled Gavin. They swam up behind Candon, who let out a yelp as they grabbed his arms. "Sacrifice! Sacrifice! Sacrifice!" they chanted.

"Oh screw you guys," laughed Candon, struggling to break free. Ricon was not about to pass up a free target, and swam up, taggin Candon easily. "Gotcha!"

"I'm so getting you guys," threatened Candon with a smile, putting the blindfold on. Scar held her hand in the air, and after a moment's surprise, Gavin high-fived it.

Candon chased around Anya for a while, but she turned out to be too quick for him, so he started going after Luna instead. "Marco!"

"Polo!" called Luna, who hadn't managed to get out of Candon's reach. She dodged just in time as he lunged at her.

"Marco!"

"Polo!" Luna swam towards the dock, picking up speed. I can push off the dock when he gets close...

"Marco!"

"Polo!"

Luna looked up, and suddenly there was Ricon, cannonballing off the dock, she was going to hit him unless she turned. He seemed to have just noticed this as well and yelled "Luna look out!" She turned sharply to the side, but unfortunately lost most of her momentum. Candon could hear the splashes, and tagger her. "Gotcha!"

"Alright, fair enough," smiled Luna, tying the blindfold back on. "Want me to get revenge on Scar and Gavin for you?"

"Yes please," she heard Candon laugh.

"Marco!"

"Polo!"

A horn blared from the dock, swimming period was over. Everyone began making their way back to the docks, and to the changing rooms. After getting into dry clothes, they walked over to the picnic table were Ari and Agi were talking and laughing. "You guys got a route?" asked Santa.

"You betcha we do," grinned Ari. "We head out, and we stop at this intersection for lunch. Agi and I already got everyone's sandwiches from the mess hall."

Pierre looked in the bag. "Jesus christ, that's a lot of sandwiches."

"Four each," Agi said. "We were surprised too. We think the cook had the number of kids in our group wrong."

"Hey, more food this way," said Santa.

"Alright, let's go then... wait, where's Gavin?" frowned Candon.

"Right here!" yelled a voice, running over from the changing room, shoes untied. "Also it's Nic now, the cool one."

Right, Gavin has dissociative identity disorder, remembered Candon, noticing that the blue necklass Gavin wore had been switched for Nic's red one. Gavin had explained this to the group the night before, but hadn't spoken much about Nic himself, in fact, he seemed a little reluctant to do so.

"Okay, now that we're all here, let's go!" Ari began marching towards the trails entrance.

Travis at first walked in the back, but got bored and bounced towards the front where Agi and Ari were leading the hike. Scar and Nic were also up there.

"We're going to be taking a turn to the left soon," said Agi, pointing ahead.

"Yeah, that way leads to this sweet waterfall," grinned Ari, walking backwards. "Zana said it looks really cool!"

Nic pointed to the map. "We should go this way instead, it'll be faster," he pointed.

"Well, the point is to take up the allotted time—" began Agi.

"Screw that, I want to go swimming again," said Nic, swiping the map out of Agi's grasp. "This way we get back sooner, so let's do it." They reached the fork, and he started walking that way.

Ari merely shrugged and kept going along the original route. "Let's keep to the plan."

"It's faster," he argued. "Nobody else wants to go on the dumb route you two planned."

"No one's following you, idiot," glared Travis. Nic was pissing him off for some reason.

Scar swipped the map away from Nic with a glare. "Come on, Agi and Ari spent all free swim on this. You can plan a route later in the week. Stop being rude." She handed the map back to Agi, who gave her a nod of thanks.

Nic argued back, but Travis was getting bored listening to him, so he drifted back, past where Candon and Pierre were talking, to where Lei was walking by herself, and looking around. He hadn't really spoken to Lei, she'd been mostly quiet so far. Well, he felt like talking to someone. "Hey, what's up?" he said. "I'm Travis, you're Lei, right?"

She jerked her head towards him distactedly, clearly she hadn't been paying attention. "Oh yeah! I'm Lei. Nice to be formally introduced to you, Travis," she said, sticking out her hand. Travis paused, and shook it.

"So," he said, scanning his brain for potentially interesting conversation topics, "So, uh, any particular reason you're at this camp?"

Lei shrugged. "Not especially. My family just moved here from Hawaii, so I got signed up by my parents to meet people."

"Yeah, my parents are forcing me to be here too," said Travis. From beyond the grave that is, but it still applied.

"Oh they're not forcing me," amended Lei. "I'm looking forwards to it. The lake is nice and warm, the people all seem great, and I checked the menu, we have potatos for dinner like twice a week."

"Why would you care about that?" snorted Travis. "Potatos aren't that good."

Lei gasped in shock and swatted him with her water bottle. He yelped in surprise. "How dare you insult potatos! They're delicious!"

"They're not that good," he said, ducking as Lei swiped her water bottle at him again. "I mean, I like them somtimes, but not all the time."

Lei grinned. "So your appreciation for potatos is sporeatic?"

Travis groaned. "My god, that was the worst pun I've heard in my entire life."

"Then eye'll see if I can come up with another one," winked Lei.

"I can't believe you're actually making potato puns. You're going to run out of them."

"In that case I'll have to mash up a few."

"Fuck you," laughed Travis. "Weren't you supposed to be shy or something?"

Lei shrugged, but smiled. "I get over it quickly."

"I heard a few of those," said Santiago from behind them, "And they were pretty impressive for being spudtaneous," he winked.

Travis put his head in his hands. "Dear god there's two of them."

Lei laughed out loud. "Potato puns are sweet."

"Life is too short for your crap," said Travis.

"Too bad, we're friends now," grinned Santiago.

"But we met five minutes ago."

Santiago gave him a surprisingly menacing glare. "We're best friends now."

"I gotta say," piped up Lei, "I yam laughing way too hard at this."

She heard Travis groan again as she and Santiago burst out laughing again. "Fuck you both."

Meanwhile, Virginia was walking near the back of the line. Too bad you can't read while walking, she thought to herself. That said, it was a very nice area. Despite the loudness of the group in the front, she could hear the birds chirping, and the wind in the trees. She looked around at all the plants, trying to see if she could recognize any of them. She noticed a few white pines, but most of them were unrecognizable. It had been a while since she'd read that book on plant recognition.

The quiet was nice. The only other person back here was Ricon, and he was... what the hell was he doing? Ricon was adjusting stones on the path, and pulling branches behind trees. The kind that were going to snap back on the next person to walk by. Ricon seemed to notice her watching him, so he gave a quick wink and shh gesture, and Virginia rolled her eyes. Jesus, what a moron. If Ricon wanted to waste his time being an immature idiot, that was his call. She'd just have to make sure she wasn't in the front during the return journey.

"Hey there!" waved Anya. Anya had mostly been drifting around the line, and now seemed to have drifted her way to the back. "How's it going?"

"Good," grunted Virginia.

"Nice day, isn't it?" asked Anya.

"I guess."

"I really like the way the sun is coming through the trees," she pointed. "It lights up the leaves. I've never been able to capture that in a sketch."

"Hm," said Virginia, wondering how long Anya was going to be attempting conversation for. She had thinking to be doing.

"You ever sketch?" asked Anya.

"No."

"Doodle?"

"No."

"Not even on math tests?"

"No."

"Huh," nodded Anya. "What is it you do in your free time?"

"Read," said Virginia, losing patience. "Look, what are you doing?"

"Making conversation?" said Anya.

"Yeah, well, I'm not really interested at the moment," Virginia said.

Anya was silent for a moment, but then grinned up at her, and said "So what's your favorite book?"

"Hunger games," snapped Virginia. "Can you stop talking to me?"

"Huh, I've always been a bigger fan of Harry Potter," mused Anya. "But Hunger Games is good too. And no, I can't stop talking, because I'm too interested in what you think of Harry Potter."

"Screw you, Hunger Games is way better," glared Virginia. "It was way more interesting and tense. I don't see why you could possibly care what I think of Harry Potter."

"I don't know," said Anya thoughtfully, "I thought the pacing was better for Harry Potter. Everything was plotted out so amazingly. I'm interested in your favorite books because I'd like to learn more about you, that's how you make friends."

"Bullshit, the pacing for Hunger Games was perfect," said Virginia. "And I'm not interested in being friends with a miscreant who lacks proper appreciation for the hunger games, so you can stop bothering me now."

"Language," said Anya reproachfully. "The pacing was good, but it wasn't great. And—"

"It was perfect," interrupted Virginia. "And the characters were better developed too."

"Alright, now that's over the line," said Anya with a smile. "They both had great characterization, but it was much more compelling in Harry Potter. You get to see them grow over seven years."

"And hunger games only had one to work with," countered Virginia, getting angrier. "That's why the characterization was better, it showed the characters in tighter situations."

"That was more of a difference in genre," pointed out Anya.

"Fuck Harry Potter and fuck you."

"Language, Virginia. And I still think Harry Potter's a better series."

Virginia gave Anya a look of utmost contempt. "Muggle."

"Pureblood supremacist," Anya shot back immediately.

Virginia stared for a moment, at Anya, in silence, and then she grinned. "You know, maybe you and I are going to be friends."

"Oh my god, does this mean the nerd-fest is over?" grumbled Nic. "You guys were going to make me fall comatose while walking."

"Oh fuck off Nic," snapped Virginia.

"Language," muttered Anya.

"Later losers," waved Nic, walking back towards the front of the line.

On the way back, he passed Luna, who was making her way to the back. She passed Travis who was swearing violently at a laughing Santiago and Lei, she drifted behind Virginia and Anya who were rapidly discussing some books they read, and she dropped to the end of the line where Ricon was messing with some branches. "Hey, what's up?" she asked.

"Not much," shrugged Ricon, bouncing the branch off a tree. "What about you?"

"The same," said Luna. "So I think you did that on purpose."

Ricon blinked. "Did what?"

"Got me out in marco polo," explained Luna. "At first I figured it was an accident, but it makes sense. I snuck up on you and got you out, you canonballed at just the right time to get me out. So, was it on purpose?"

"I'm not sure," said Ricon, and for a moment his face looked impassive, but Luna noticed his lips subtly twitching into a smile. "Did I?"

"You sneaky devil!" Luna exclaimed. "I am so getting you back next time we play."

Ricon laughed. "You mean you'll try to." He paused, and gave her another of those smiles, so slight it was almost hard to see. "Are you mad?"

Luna thought about it. "No," she said. "I think it was clever. I wish you'd bragged about it afterwards though, what's the point of being subtle if no one knows it?"

Ricon laughed. "Think about what you just said for a moment."

Luna snorted. "Okay, the grammar was not in my favor on that one."

"We're here!" yelled Ari's voice from the front of the line.

They'd arrived at the pond.

"I'm gonna jump in," said Lei, putting down her backpack.

"Fucking moron," said Travis.

"Language," muttered Anya.

It was a smallish pond, maybe twenty yards across, with some logs in it and the soudns of frogs croaking. It was difficult to see the bottom through the mud, but it didn't look particularly deep.

"You sure that's the best idea?" asked Agi, glancing at the pond. "It looks a little dirty."

"It'll be fine," grinned Ari, taking off their socks and shoes. "Who else is coming?"

"Me," waved Ricon.

"What the hell," shrugged Scar, taking her shoes off.

"No thanks, I like not having pneumonia," said Virginia, giving the pond a glare.

Santiago waded into the pond. "Ooh, the water's nice and cool—wait Ricon, is that my shoe?"

Ricon stuck his tongue out. "It's my shoe now."

Santiago laughed, and reached over. "I need that! I don't want it to get wet." Ricon splashed out of the way with the shoe, running deeper into the pond.

"I'll save you Santi," grinned Ari, splashing after Ricon. Ricon laughed and ran around the pond.

"Guys, settle down, you're getting me wet," complained Virginia. Nic scooped up and handful of water and splashed her. "Hey!" she glared, ducking out of the way. "What the hell?"

Meanwhile, Ari Santiago and Ricon were struggling for control of the shoe, Santiago was practically carrying Ricon, and laughing. Lei grabbed Ricon's left shoe and waded into the pond. "Alright mister, give it back or the shoe gets it!"

"Surprise!" yelled Ari, jumping on Ricon and Santiago from behind and with a shriek of laughter, they toppled over into the pond. Lei jumped on top.

"See this is why I didn't want people going in," sighed Agi.

"Fucking morons," muttered Travis.

Pierre peered into the pond. "Um, guys? They're not coming back up."

Immediately everyone stared at the pond. It was still rippling, but the four of them were not resurfacing.

"Guys?" said Scar, alarmed, removing her shoes finally (they'd been tied pretty tight). She splashed into the pond and bent down, searching for them. "Guys? This really isn't funny."

There was no answer. Anya could suddenly feel her heart beating heavily in her chest.

Scar looked back at the others. "I'm diving under to see if I can see them."

"Yeah, okay," nodded Candon. Scar took a breath, and ducked under.

And then she didn't come back up.

Agi jumped to his feet. "Okay, me and two other people head into the pond and see if we can find them and pull them out. Don't stick your heads underwater." Candon and Luna were the first to leap to their feet and splash in after Agi. "The rest of you guys stay out, we don't know what—" Agi cut off as something seemed to break underneath him, and he and the others fell down into the pond unreally fast.

Pierre let out a shriek and then covered his mouth quickly.

"What the fuck is this voodoo shit?" glared Travis, jumping into the pond.

"Use this," said Virginia, breaking a stick off a tree and handing it to him, before breaking off another for herself. "There could be some kind of collapsing root structure. I read about those."

"Nerd," muttered Nic, but he took the stick offered to him.

Pierre took one as well, but when Anya tried to take one, Virginia shook her head. "You'd better stay out, in case I'm wrong."

"No way," glared Anya, jumping back up into the woods to grab a pole. "Our friends could be dying, and—" she cut off as she turned around, because the four of them had vanished, and the pond was completely still.

"Guys?" she yelled, running down to the edge. She scanned the lake's surface, but saw nothing. Nothing at all.

"Guys?" she whispered.

The pond was still.

She bent down and looked carefully at the lake water. It looked like normal water. It looked completely normal. She reached out her hand, and touched the surface with the tip of her finger--

There was a sudden yanking feeling across her entire body, she felt herself falling, the world spinning, and everything faded to darkness.

Alright.  Long author's note coming, but if you're one of the players it's really important that you read ALL of it.

1) First of all, I apologize for this mammoth chapter.  It got WAY longer than I was expecting.  I promise the other chapters will not be half this long.

2) You'll notice that there isn't really a decision for your characters to make here.  Yeah sorry, like I said, this chapter got longer than I expected, and I decided to stop before the decision point so you guys would be forced to read less sheer text, and so the break point would be better.  Instead of using the response form to comment your character's decision, please just comment your character's thoughts and feelings about what just happened to them.  It doesn't say this in the chapter, but after falling in, they surfaced in a similar looking pond in an unfamiliar forest, so go from there.

TL;DR:  Instead of commenting the response form, just comment your character's feelings about this situation.

3) The next bit:  Feedback.  How as my writing style?  Was it too descriptive or not descriptive enough?  Should there be more humor?  Thoughts?

4) Any problems with your character?  Am I representing them accurately?  If it's a problem with the friendships, oof, there were a few I had to change just to make the friendships balanced.  But I didn't do that with a lot.

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6) Have a fantastic day!  I realize this has nothing to do with the group cyoa,  but still.  You all rock.  Go have an ice cream.

7) And lastly, an incorrect quote.  Because as previously mentioned, I am obsessed with incorrect quotes.

Gavin: How was school?

Pierre: My stomach growled super loud in french.

Gavin: It... what?

Pierre: I would like to clarify that my stomach did not speak in french. It growled in french class.

Ari: Bonjour

Lei: Le growl

Santiago: Hon hon hon feed me a baguette

Gavin: Guys.

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