Title : Mckennlee Winters The Teenaged Spy

Author : finickywriter451

Synopsis :
This is a story about a teenaged spy named Mckennlee Winters, who just so happens to be the world's best secret agent. Read to find out what happens when everything she knew falls apart.

Status : Ongoing, 5 parts written at time of review

Link : https://www.wattpad.com/story/75203914-mckennlee-winters-the-teenaged-spy

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I could go on about the glaring punctuation error in the book title, and how there should be a comma after the name . . . but I won't. *insert smiley face here* Simply because I do think that inserting a comma would have ruined the title's flow. So no comma it is!

This story is a change from the other spy stories I've read. Not in terms of plot or setting, but due to its target audience. I feel as if the author intended this book to be for children. If it was made into a movie it would most probably be rated U. Think Spy Kids. It's pretty family-friendly. There's hardly any violence, a healthy dose of humor and not a single crass word in sight.

Of course, I am not implying that it is immature. In fact, it's rather refreshing to see a light spy novel for once. It carries the same tone as Famous Five and Secret Seven, but with more action and romance. 

A few things I hope the author looks into is, firstly, the introduction. I get that laying out her family background clears several things up, but I felt as if it jars very strongly with the rest of the story. It's too narrative, too factual. It reminds me of an opening to someone's dreary autobiography. Considering the rest of the story is told from the protagonist's point of view, why don't you let her reveal her family background herself? Maybe when she saw Carter for instance. Then you could say something like It's been ages since I last saw Carter. I remembered, so clearly, the events of eight years ago. My parents perished in a fire, and the agency had been my home ever since. As for Carter, well, his parents . . . and so on. It would flow more naturally.

Also, you said that she was the best spy in the agency. Well, I haven't been able to see that yet. She seems a pretty ordinary spy to me, though figuring out Carter's parents' motives was pretty smart. But dealing with the intruders and several other things. . . in fact, she herself said she was a horrible spy at one point! Giving her more confidence and showing the readers more examples of her skills would better support the statement that she was an excellent spy.

Other than the above factors and one or two spelling errors, it's a good story. 

Wrap it up now - stars or stones? So far they seem to be average stars to me. A little polishing and excitement - but don't rush things - would be more than adequate to bump the story into the spotlight.

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Disclaimer : This review is not a personal attack on the author, and is merely a reader's honest opinion. No offense is meant.