Book Title: Silence

Author: ur_favouritexx

Review:

1. Cover- The cover is amazing! It suites the plot so well that I had to spend some time to find even a little mistake (It's the crazy artist in me, can't do anything about it). But, I think it would look better if you were to lose the tiny badges in the corner, just one containing a major achievement will suffice and you can put the rest in a separate chapter. I would also suggest that you try to use different fonts for different headings, that is; one for the title, one for username, etc. I believe the 'chiller' font style would look pretty great or perhaps something along the lines.

2. Title: I'm a sucker for one-worded titles, so when I read yours I was so damn sure the story was gonna be interesting. The title was truly thoughtful and matched completely with the basic storyline. But, I'd still suggest you loose the 'Editing' part from your title and put it in the summary itself, it does nothing but distract the reader's attention and also prevents the beauty of the title to seep in instantly.

3. Summary: The summary was great and also grammatically correct. I'd suggest you check on the structure a bit though like you must put some kind of finishing line after the quote and when the actual summary is finished. This makes sure that the reader doesn't have to scroll down through your endless list of awards and reviews in hopes for more information in regards to the story. I'd usually ask you to lose all that extra info and put in a separate chapter, but that's completely on to you. You must keep the reader's reviews though, they look super cool.

4. Character Building: I find Leah's character to be quite cool, you figured out the worried mom part well. The way she seemed suspicious of Lisa's friend Beanie is actually how every mom acts ( At least mine does). The man in the shadows is a very spooky character too, I normally don't read horror stories at all but this character has got me interested. So far the characters' personalities are improving according to the story at an adequate pace, so kudos on that. I liked the fact that your characters had flaws, in a world aiming to be perfect flaws that made your story very realistic. The emotions of the characters were well-defined and felt real. The anguish, worry, suspense, everything was well mapped out.

5. Grammar: I didn't find any major mistakes in the grammatical area. The fact that your story didn't have any slangs at all relieved me a lot, they destroy the whole theme. There were indeed some little errors, but they could easily be checked upon while editing. The plot was very well developed and so hid the mistakes almost perfectly. But, I would suggest you do look over the sentences a bit closer and try to shorten the explaining part. Other than that, the grammar was way above the average.

6. Plot: When you mentioned the "hunts" part at the very beginning I was pretty sure it was going to end up being the typical monster story, but you twisted it out into a stalker which was my first shock in the story. The other shock came when Leah sees this guy outside her window, and the husband dying part. This had me believing that the stalker was for sure the killer, but then you introduced Beanie, the dirt in hair part made me freak out a little bit, cuz Leah noticed that little detail, something which was mostly invisible. I freaked out a lot, but that's mostly because I don't read horror or suspense for that matter. The plot is great though you spun the spooky tale pretty well. I didn't find any plot holes, the flow of the story was smooth. The flashbacks were a good addition as well.

7. Special Requests: Okay chapter 19 was a bit out of the blue for me considering I didn't read the chapters in between. My good guess is that Leah killed the killer, somehow got rid of the stalker but this was done after being in captivity for a while. Considering Lisie's loss of hearing there was some sort of crash or gunshot near her which caused her ears to get damaged. This is only guessing on my part, but the end of the chapter again puts the reader in suspense so that is a good start. I am indeed curious about where she'll go and whether she'd end up finding a way to cure Lisie's hearing problem, and does it get infected, do they have another crash. A lot of questions indeed I hope the following chapters answer them, and the fact that these questions arise is enough to prove the fact that the flow and suspense of the story are great, in Hindi we'd say Lajawaab!

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~theloner