Round 2 Results
You've impressed-uh me much for Round 2, SmackDowners!
We've got some funny stories and some that are a little more serious—very cool, especially those of you who opted to go serious for the funny (Dudecore) prompt and funny for the serious (Hermaphrodeity) prompt. Mad props for that, yo, and fo' sho' there be totes dope skrilla up in the hizz-ouse, G-thang.
*coughs*
Ready to see the results for Round 2? Keen to see who will stay alive in this game, and who will be the first ones to go to Redemption Island?
First, let's get out of the way who's got an advantage after successfully completing Bonus Round 1:
AngusEcrivain
jewel1307
Reffster
AllanFisher
Congrats, you four! You'll see your advantages applied automatically to your scores for Round 2. This very well could be what bumps you guys past the competition and ensures you don't get sent to Redemption Island.
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Now let's see if that's the case, shall we?
Detailed results for each person, divided by tribe (so feel free to scroll past the tribe you're not on, or don't):
Dudecore - Sub-genre: Spy-Fi
Judgement by HardeeBurger
Dan, I must admit, has hit all the marks, firing on all cylinders. The only thing that drives me nuts is all his friggin' whilsts. But it's just the way he writes, and it is a word, so no points off for that.
In fact, I can't see a single reason not to reward Dan with a perfect score! His sentence structure is good, his story easy to read and he made good use of the prompts, writing a tale that is interesting and funny. So it's our first FIFTEEN!
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: The 5/5 PSG score sent a signal into the sky, alerting I, The Grammar Nazi. After reading AngusEcrivain's story with my admittedly tired eyes, I spotted an error—"all-too aware" should be "all too aware," as those words don't form a compound adjective to describe "aware." A way it would be hyphenated would be something like the following: "He had an all-too-familiar air of superiority to him." However, the rules for a perfect 5/5 in PSG state you can have one error. So the 5/5 sticks.
Advantage from Bonus Round 1 bumps up the highest non-5/5 score to a 5/5—however in this case there weren't any non-5/5 scores, so the advantage effectively becomes a +1.
Total score - 16/15
Judgement by OutrageousOllo
5 for Prompt. Fine. You can have a 5, as yes, the prompts were well integrated. But just a word of warning -- Austin Powers is a super-cool dude, and if you insult him again... you better pray I'm not judging.
3 for Grammar. Sorry, dude, but you've missed the mark here. Lots of little things like "1990's" should be "1990s" and "longest running reality television show" should be "longest-running reality television show."
4 for Enjoyablity. Sure, I enjoyed it. The ending was a bit of a downer, though. Being betrayed and left for dead like that. I wanted some REVENGE. Imagine if Austin Powers 2.0 came back from the dead to save her... That would be cool.
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by HardeeBurger
Jules' story is fantastic. I mean, you know me... I love all that boob stuff. And the twist at the end had me instantly backtracking, to see where the Gotcha was. There was a little trouble with the sentence structure, so a FOUR for Grammar.
And the use of the prompts was stellar. I'd give her a FIVE-POINT-FIVE for that score if you'd let me.
Just a little trouble in my mind, though, as to exactly what happens next, after MadMike whisks off Safina under the nose of Dave's big .50 cal. So a FOUR for Readability.
I assume MadMike wants to boff her, but that's just not clear.
And you know me and boobies. :-)
Advantage from Bonus Round 1 bumps up the highest non-5/5 score to a 5/5—which means we have 5/5, 5/5 and 4/5 = 14/15.
2 points docked for being under the word count (1 point per every 500 words below).
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt Adherence - 5
Grammar - 5
Enjoyability - 4
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: I found an error: "high pitched scream" should be "high-pitched scream." So the 5 for PSG sticks.
Total score - 14/15
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt adherence - 5
Grammar - 3
Enjoyability - 2
Total score - 10/15
Hermaphrodeity - Sub-genre: BonePunk
Judgement by HardeeBurger
I'm just not sure of what to make of this -- are there references to some sort of media that I'm not aware of? Whatever the references, it was easy to see them so use of prompts will get a FOUR, because a time or two they seemed contrived.
Grammar and such is good, with perhaps a comma or two out of line. So let's go with a FIVE anywho, because I don't quibble about commas much.
But readability was a slog. I can't quite grasp the story arc. The prompts were nothing to get excited about (in my eye) and Spade's story was quite LitFic-cy, so credit is given for that. But I'm gonna have to give it a THREE.
So what is that? TWELVE?
yeah. a twelve.
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by OutrageousOllo
5 for Prompt. All rules were followed.
4 for Grammar. Pretty Good.
3 for Enjoyability. Um so this story reads suspiciously like the writing of another contestants... I'm talking longer, convoluted sentences, sometimes hard to read. You know what I mean, Nimrod. I'm onto you. Don't think I don't know your secret identity. I know you're secretly a massive AngusEcrivain fan. Otherwise, pretty enjoyable story, just could be easier to read.
Bonus Points: For sneaking "Fuck you, Mad Mike Marsbergen" into the narrative and making it actually fit lol.
Total score - 12/15
Judgement by HardeeBurger
I think Bria should get credit for not only having a cute real name, but for also having a cute username. But I imagine I don't get to do that. Do I?
Anyway, there's a bit of odd wording here and there, and a little too much redundancy, so I'm gonna hafta give a THREE for the PSG. And another THREE, I think, for the use of the prompts, as some weren't too much an integral part of the story.
BUT! To the Readability of story I will give a FIVE, because it was well thought out and easy to read.
So a total score of ELEVEN goes to Vintage.
I just wanna know, though... what did happen to Elio? And what about those little cars he said he was gonna make?
:-)
Total score - 11/15
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt Adherence - 5
Grammar - 5
Enjoyability - 5
I would give this a bonus if it were possible, it was fantastic.
MadMikeMarsbergen's comment: I found the following errors...
1. "high pitched keening" should be "high-pitched keening."
2. The part here: "Also, you seem to think you're some sort of a bad-ass-" the Chuck detached one of its own ribs, and with a casual flick of the wrist sent it arrowing towards Marsbergen's chest, where with pinpoint accuracy it penetrated a gap in his bone armour and punctured a lung, "-but my ass is the baddest ass there is."
Inserting actions into dialogue should be done like as follows: "Also, you seem to think you're some sort of a bad-ass"—the Chuck detached one of its own ribs, and with a casual flick of the wrist sent it arrowing towards Marsbergen's chest, where, with pinpoint accuracy, it penetrated a gap in his bone armour and punctured a lung—"but my ass is the baddest ass there is."
Alternatively, you could just make them separate bits of dialogue and action.
3. "As for you little lady" should be "As for you, little lady."
Thus this story should be a 4/5 in the PSG category, as I've caught a few mistakes.
Advantage from Bonus Round 1 bumps up the highest non-5/5 score to a 5/5—bumping PSG back up to a 5/5.
Total score - 15/15
Judgement by JettaFrame
Prompt Adherence - 5
Grammar - 3
Enjoyability - 2
Advantage from Bonus Round 1 bumps up the highest non-5/5 score to a 5/5—meaning PSG will go up from a 3/5 to a 5/5.
Total score - 12/15
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As you guys know, two people—the lowest-scoring person from each tribe—would be sent to Redemption Island following the results of this second round.
The two people are: bloodsword from Dudecore, and VintageVulpes from Hermaphrodeity.
I'm sorry to say it, but you both have been eliminated from your respective tribe. However, your journey does not end here. You will have a shot at re-entering the game. Grab your nifty little sci-fi flashlights and head to Redemption Island, where the two of you will face off against parishsp in the very first writing duel.
Also, AngusEcrivain had the highest score for this round (congrats!), which means they had to choose one of you remaining competitors to send to Exile Island.
They chose Reffster.
Reffster, you will be alone and afraid for the time being, but you will return to the game at the start of Round 3. In the meantime, you will be unable to compete in any bonus rounds. Sad, I know, but it'll be okay.
I will contact you via PM with the specific details of what happens while you're an Exile.
The rest of you—got nothin' for ya except this bag of stale chips, if you want it. Congrats on the wins, guys. Head back to camp and await your next challenge. Should be about a week or so before Round 3 goes up. But in the meantime there will be Bonus Round 2—so keep your eyes peeled for that—as well as the first Redemption Duel, which you might want to pay attention to just to see how it works. Some of you will be there soon, unfortunately.
A third clue for each of the hidden Redemption Idols will be revealed in a few moments. Check the Clues to the Redemption Idols part for more info.
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