Title - Lost Eden by Bluelovesleep

First of all sorry for the late review, since you said that this version was your seventh edit, I took my time to analyse things a little deeper.

Title 05/05

Perfect!

Book Cover 05/05

Eye-catching and simply amazing!

Blurb 08/10

The message was clear, but the wording's a little/tad-bit old fashioned, thus sounds boring! Try alternating the words with something more grabbing and interesting.

Character Development 08/10

Lovely! Seriously, each character was described perfectly, the depth of each personality shone splendidly throughout the story.

Negatives - the pattern however was kinda similar, if only I didn't notice the POV banner/aesthetic, I would have mistaken it for the same person's thoughts.

Little tip- try writing small behavioural patterns for each, like one person's likes is another persons dislike or differentiate the wording pattern when they talk.

Genre Relevance 05/05

Apt! Well done!

Plot 09/10

An interesting mystery-filled, dynamic pack! The building tension was rather intriguing to read but I still didn't find about the Immortals, writer, please don't keep the main plot in the dark for too long.

Story flow 09/10

Amazing! I just have one complaint, I first read your story offline, and never noticed that each chapter was each characters POV becouse I was offline and the banner wouldn't load, so I suggest you add the POV in words at the start of each chapter for your offline binge readers.

Grammar And Spelling 08/10

There were a few mistakes scattered throughout the book, tiny mistakes from a missing letter to a wrong helping word but it's visible when you read it, but nothing good proofreading cannot solve!

The grammar however was good! The tenses were apt and the same throughout the story (5 chaps)

Writing Style 08/10

Just a few spelling mistakes, other than that, the writing style is amazing!

Original and unique! Not cliché, which is a plus. And the plot description is grabbing! The worldbuilding is good too.

The first chap (prologue) - ellipsis three times in a row is not a good option writer, try alternating it with words to show the emotions.

So we already learned the name of the father in the middle so why keep saying the 'father' throughout the chapter than using his name? It's confusing to read sometimes.

Interaction With Readers 05/05

Provoked some emotions when I read, well done!

Vocabulary 09/10

Can be improved a little bit, the spellings need to be checked. Apart from that, well done!

Overall Enjoyment 09/10

Would definitely read it when given a chance!

Total 88/100

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