Title: The Life of Cassander Stoutsworth

Author: ILikeCrabs

Genre: Fantasy

Quick Summary: Vignettes of life, I guess.

Thoughts:

This is a story that goes through and - literally - recounts the life of Cassander Stoutsworth. How he lived and how he got to present day. At parts, it's engaging. My biggest, problem, though, is why is he doing this? The first chapter has no real, logical lead into him giving his life story. Why is he doing this? Furthermore, why should I care? Why do I care about the Mossy Flagon and Thomas? We're not really given a lot of time TO care about them. Why did the author choose this method to open the story up? It gives readers specific expectations that were then not met.

As such, I don't really think the narrative style chosen was the best fit for the novel. Which is a shame, because the general idea is a good one if it was presented in a better way. I would suggest either writing through the sequence of events and delving deeper into them, or choosing a better reason and transition into the story itself.

Also, delve deeper into Bethany. Cassander dedicates a LOT of words to Lilly, but Bethany is the real problem here - at least, she's the one that basically fucked Cassander over. Really, all the characters could be fleshed out more, but she's the biggest victim in my opinion of being a cardboard cutout. 

There were also some minor grammar errors, but that can be fixed with a light round of edits.

Again, this could be something really awesome, but it's framed in... well, not the best way.