Reviewed by: Beauty_queen2612

Book Title: The Temple Unleashed

Author's Name: Avid-ReaderOrWriter

Cover: 10/10

It's an amazing cover and perfectly fits the theme of the story. The title is boldly written and the choice of font makes it stand out. The snake tangled in the golden key makes it more intriguing like there's a hidden meaning to it which can only be found when I've read the story.

Title: 10/10

Great title and goes well with the cover.

Blurb/Description: 8/10

It isn't really stated what is at stake. What was only mentioned was that a terrible power would be awakened and unleashed which wouldn't really do much justice to piquing your readers interest. I would say if you could lay a bit more emphasis on the terrible power and not just plainly putting it out that way.

Creativity and originality : 10/10

I could relate with Charlie's pain witnessing the bull getting hurt and I love that you brought out the fact that bullfight shouldn't be seen as a source of entertainment as animals are getting injured or even killed.

Plot and Flow: 15/20

The plot seemed to progress slowly as the first five chapters went by without any significant changes in both MC's life. I get the point of indulging your readers into each character's life but something should happen that moves the plot forward and keeps your readers on the edge of their seats. The blurb is an insight on what would uncover along the story and it was until I got to the fifth or sixth chapter that I could start seeing traces of what was told in the blurb.

Character Development: 10/20

I didn't exactly get to know each of the characters in the aspect that their emotions were mostly described on surface level. I couldn't view their world through them as everything seemed a bit vague. It could be as a result of the point of view used, I'm not quite versed with third person pov but what I'm certain of is there are ways you could portray each character's personality without necessarily using a word to describe their emotion like 'Kat said snapped or he glared'.

Writing style: 9/10

The first two paragraphs of the prologue was mainly info dumps about the world, rather than letting your readers meet your characters. Though since it's only done in the prologue, I suppose it should still be fine but I do feel it could have been done better. You can show the world through each characters. Their actions and words can be used to point out the important parts of the world.

The foreshadowing was executed perfectly well in the prologue, it was enough to make me eager to read further into the story.

I love how you portrayed the relationship between Charlie and his brother in the second chapter, I enjoyed reading that part.

Grammar, spellings, etc.: 8/10

In the second chapter where Alfonso met Charlie, '...The man noticing Charlie's discomfort said,' then what he said was written in another paragraph which should have been continued from that same paragraph.

From the same place, "...and the constant taunting of the matador, Alfonso, me" he added jabbing a thumb at himself.' I would suggesting cutting out 'me' since what comes after clearly shows that he is referring to himself as Alfonso. Also a punctuation mark is absent after that sentence, a full stop should end it and the next letter should be in uppercase 'He'.

Overall: 80/100

Aside from everything I pointed out, I enjoyed it nonetheless. The banter between Charlie and Kat was fun to read. The mysterious necklace was intriguing and I found it quite interesting how both of them were fascinated by the necklace and wanted it while my mind was on the strange lady who dropped it.

These are all suggestions on my part by the way so please feel free to change only what feels right to you. Thank you for accepting me as your reviewer and I would love to see your story grow!

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