Reviewed by: Avid-ReaderOrWriter

Book Title: THE CAGE

Author's name: HJ_Fiction

Cover- Your cover is very interesting! It gives off the feel of a mysterious, thriller, sort of book. The font is also well chosen! Since it's a mysterious/thriller story, I highly recommend adding a subtitle to add to its mysterious feel.

Rate- 10/10

Blurb- I love how you start your blurb with a question! It hooks the reader and makes them want to keep reading! You say enough to give the reader a feel for what to expect but not too much to give it all away. You provide enough details and the right adjectives to subtly tell the reader that this will be a thrilling adventure!

Rate- 10/10

Plot- I got to say, I haven't read/reviewed any books that follow the template you used! It's a very unique way of writing! However, it was a little bit hard to follow with all the different POVs and scene changes. The actual plot was very interesting though! Usually other people don't have an appreciation for fanfiction because its essentially taking someone else's work and tweaking it just a bit, but you came up with an entirely different plot but using well-loved characters. Good job with the originality here!

Rate- 9/10 (it was a bit hard to follow it since there were so many scene changes and POVs)

Ending- Since this is still an ongoing work, there is no ending yet

Rate- N/A

Character Development- This was a little too short for character development but I love how realistic they are! My favorite character was Rosé. The way you portrayed her depression as a famous movie star, and the way you described her cleaning off the makeup on her face, one side like a famous movie star and the other side without any makeup. That was probably my favorite part!

Rate- N/A (there was not enough time for it)

Grammar- Oh dear....this is where stuff starts to go downhill. There were quite a few grammar mistakes. For example, in your aesthetics chapter about Taehyung, you had an unnecessary pronoun. "This person is an amazing professor but leading a worse life.Well,let he and his story be aside. Will reveal later!" The first sentence is fine but I'd recommend that you change "but leading" to just the word leads. In the second sentence, you should put a space after each punctuation mark just to make it less clustered and organized. You should also change "let he and his story be aside" to something less confusing such as "Well, let him and his story be set aside for now"

Throughout the whole story, there are quite a few grammatical errors. In various places, you forgot to capitalize the i's and there are a few misspelled errors. There are also places where you used the wrong verb tense. I would highly recommend you to go back and try to work out the grammatical errors. You could also send in a request to the Gemme Community for an editor.

Rate- 6/10 (You quite a few errors which you should look over)

Final rate- 85/100 (everything is good except for the grammatical errors)

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