Reviewed by: Avid-ReaderOrWriter

Book title: The Book of Legends

Author's name: randomslasher

Blurb- Overall it's a good blurb! However, it is a bit short. I recommend taking out the first part and adding more about the kids, especially about the one who dies before the planned marriage. Don't forget your punctuation... "Blood being sacrificed families losing each."....put a comma between sacrificed and families. I think you forgot other after each. Your final quote should look like this.... " "Blood being sacrificed, families losing each other...." I'm not sure if you just forgot or are doing this on purpose but you don't have to capitalize The Kingdoms, Kings, PEACE, and HARMONY. I like how you ended the blurb with a question. It gets the reader hooked to find out what will happen.

Rate-8/10

Cover- I love the vibe of the cover! It's giving off the fantasy/monarch type. The dripping blood was a nice touch and I love your font! I only recommend putting your name or pen name down on the cover. You could say under or at the top of the title...By (your name)...just to make it look more professional.

Rate- 10/10

Plot/Grammar- First off, I'd like to say how much I loved the names you came up with! Entrinnia, Erem, Darsson, Alethea, etc. They go well with the fantasy monarch genre you have here. The plot is also very immersing and interesting. You balance out the action-packed scenes and the dialogue-filled scenes. Sometimes, an author would have too many chapters with all dialogue and no action which can get pretty boring at times or they might have too many chapters in a row with too much action. Very good job balancing them both out. I did notice a few grammatical errors. When you have an onomatopoeia (A word that sounds like the sound it describes, or a word formed by imitating a sound) there is no need to put it in quotes. The only time you would need to use quotes is when a character is speaking when you are citing something from a different source, or when the statement, or paragraph is memorable. In chapter 5, there is no need to capitalize every letter in invaders. You said "INVADERS" but it's not very good to use all capitals when writing. That is where your use of adjectives and descriptive words comes in! There are exceptions when using all capitals such as in a moment of flurry, or panic. This is just a recommendation but I would suggest you try using more descriptive adjectives to convey what you wanted the reader to feel when you wrote using all capitals. In Chapter 4, you had a few misspelled errors. Non is spelled with an e at the end of it. I also noticed you might have forgotten a word in the quote you say at the end of every chapter, "The plan is almost set, Only left to do is strike...." You should say "The only thing left to do is strike..." If you write on a WORD document or Doc, I highly recommend you pay close attention to the underlined words in red or blue, it'll detect any misspellings or typos and will help you with that.

Rate- 8/10

Character Development- There wasn't much character development from what I read. Maybe I would have to read more but by seven chapters, you should start to see something but I didn't notice anything. You should also add more of a personality to your characters. Again, maybe I should've read more than seven chapters but after seven chapters, your reader should start to recognize what kind of personality the main characters would have. I did notice in some paragraphs you spelled Leo's name Leo...but in other parts, you added an n to the end. I'm not sure if it's just a typo or if it's on purpose, but if it is a nickname, maybe you would want to clarify that it is.

Rate- 4/10

Overall/Final - I enjoyed reading the chapters! My favorite part was the fighting scene, you did a good job describing that part. Watch out for your typos and grammatical errors. Try to add more of a personality or characteristic to your characters and keep their name consistent.

Rate- 80/100

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