Reviewed by: ChristineAcedon

Book Title: Paladin of the Peaceful Lady

Author's Name: zabbitz22

Cover: 8/10

The cover is interesting. The color of the title doesn't seem to fit the color scheme of the rest of the cover. I would recommend a more neutral color for the title, but otherwise it fits with the vibe of your story.

Title: 10/10

The title stands out and is easy to remember; a helpful thing for when readers want to recommend the story to a friend. It clearly indicates to potential readers the type of story they're about to be in for without giving much of anything away.

Blurb/Description: 6/10

The description is too short. It introduces the character, but there just seems to be too much missing. I recommend taking a look at the story by @ray_of_sunshine9 called 101 Writing Tips from an Exhausted Reviewer. In one of the many very helpful and informative chapters, they go into an easy formula to write effective and attention-grabbing blurbs. A quick highlight is this: blurbs should include an intro to the main character, the setting, the problem/conflict, and what they stand to lose (or gain).

Creativity and originality: 10/10

While the idea of a 'warrior' hanging up their sword isn't a new concept, you've managed to make it your own. Moving through the world through Drake's perspective doesn't feel overdone. I want to go through it with him, and see what he'll do.

Plot and Flow: 20/20

The pacing is perfect throughout. You have a solid foundation to build from as the story unfolds and it doesn't feel forced at all. Your storytelling is easy to follow and understand even as it keeps your reader on the edge of their seat, waiting to find out what happens next. It makes them want to keep reading.

Character Development: 20/20

You allow your readers to get to know the characters naturally and without overloading them with information all at once. Drake's interactions offer a clear view of his relationship with the townspeople and his family, as well as his friends.

You also do a good job of keeping the characters true to their age; capturing the portrayal of smitten teenage dreams as well as the delightful youth of the younger children. Greenie was an interesting little surprise; like a cute little sidekick. I really enjoyed him as well as the usefulness of his foreshadowing.

Writing style: 10/10

I'm envious of how descriptive you are throughout your story, making it very easy for your readers to see everything from the small shrine to the farmstead and dirt roads and pathways leading away from Raven's Wing.

Grammar, spellings, etc.: 8/10

Just a few grammatical errors here and there. For example, at the end of someone's speaking, you're missing the comma before the quotation marks, or the word 'he' is capitalized in the middle of a sentence for no apparent reason. Another thing I noticed was overly long paragraphs that could be broken up a bit. Overall, it looked good.

Overall: 92/100

You've painted a world, all your own, and you've allowed your readers the opportunity to delve into it with you. This story isn't typically one I would even think to pick up, but I'm glad that I did. I'm invested in Drake and his family. I want to see how it plays out. I would still recommend some editing, mainly for grammatical errors throughout, but overall, the story has a solid foundation. Your characters are clearly outlined and speak for themselves. Thank you for giving me the opportunity to check it out!

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