Reviewed by: ChristineAcedon

Book Title: Hidden Scars

Author's Name: Kanhakisakhi

Cover: 10/10

I think that the font type and color work well with the dark forest background. The cover is simplistic, yet catches the eye.

Title: 10/10

Given the plot of the story, I think 'Hidden Scars' is the perfect title for your story and it fits with the overall vibe very well.

Blurb/Description: 6/10

The description gives off the right feeling for the story and definitely allows readers to determine whether or not it is the type of story they'd like to read, however I think it would be better and even gain more readers if you included a little bit more information regarding the character and plot. Who is she? What's her name? Where is she at? What hardships is she facing? Just a little bit more detail for your potential readers to go off of.

I will say that your prologue is very well written and almost reads like a description in itself, if maybe a bit too long to actually be the description.

Creativity and originality: 10/10

The entire concept of this story is well done so far. You put your own unique touch on women's rights and you do it very well. Added to the concept, you have a wonderful way with words, making even the mundane task of running errands or stepping into a library interesting. Your character, Valerie, has a strong voice. We may not be able to hear it yet, but its clear in your work that she will and does.

Plot and Flow: 19/20

Your story flows well together. Your chapters are short and there is a lot happening without bombarding your readers with too much information at once. As you're setting up your story, you do a very good job of not overloading and overwhelming the readers to the point that they can't keep up or get confused. Your story is easy to follow and your characters are easy to connect and sympathize with.

Character Development: 20/20

You don't skimp on thoughts and emotions. You lay it all out for us to see and feel along with your characters. I'm really happy to see the development of Eleanor as well as her daughter. The way you go about showing us their lives, their priorities and their dreams, makes it very easy to connect with them and watch as they progress and evolve.

I also loved the phone call between Valerie and Mr. Harper. It's a huge moment for her.

Writing style: 10/10

I like the way you describe things throughout the story. For example, two of my favorites is in chapter two, "the weight of the bags mirrored the heaviness in her heart" and "thick with the scent of old paper and forgotten memories." You do an amazing job of describing the world, Valeries thoughts and emotions, and even the emotions of others without if feeling dry or boring (I'm a dialogue person, and I sometimes have trouble focusing if people aren't talking throughout the story).

Grammar, spellings, etc.: 10/10

It's clear that you've put a lot of time into your work. Your grammar and spelling is nearly flawless. I didn't notice any mistakes within your work.

Overall: 95/100

As I've mentioned, you've been very thorough in your editing and you have a way with words. The way you manage to address an important subject within this and draw in your readers is well done. Some things that I've noticed that I would like to point out are that there are moments where you add something that don't need to be in the story. For example, early on, you disrupt the writing to indicate the story is switching to "Valerie's POV" and even "Eleanor's Thoughts" when it felt like we were already in their POV or their thoughts. I don't think that needs to be highlighted given the perspective of the story in those moments, but that is just one person's opinion.

I look forward to reading more of your story and I can't wait to see all that Valerie (and hopefully her mother) will overcome throughout.

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