Reviewer: Avid-ReaderOrWriter

Title: Hell's Torturer: The Demon in Disguise

Author: varckk

Plot- The story is an interesting plot of twists and turns. Though it's not exactly original, it was interesting to read. I would recommend that you try to use more descriptive words. I want to see what you are seeing when you write the book. I must say, when I got to the part when Damien was torturing Steph, it wasn't as intense as I was hoping for. When you read a thriller/intense scene you want to feel what the main character is going through, though I have to admit, that chapter was probably my favorite. I would also definitely put a warning sign up everytime you write a chapter with gore/smut. I was a bit surprised when he started cutting off her fingers so definitely put up a warning for gore or something. I'm ok with it while others might be a bit sensitive with that. But overall, the plot is very interesting.

Rate- 8/10

Grammar/typos- I only noticed a few misplaced commas and a few minor typos

Rate- 10/10

Cover- Everyone knows wattpad readers always judge a book by its cover.....I love the red background and typo, but the theme it's giving off is not what I'm reading in the story. You want the cover to be like a window into the book. I would take out the face of Damien, then add maybe his silhouette among shadows and dim lighting. The lighting can be red like the background and try to make the title pop a little more. You need the cover to have more of a mysterious, almost scary-like appearance. The colors look a little too bright to be a cover for a horror/thriller/romance.

Rate- 6.5/10

Character Development- I love Steph's personality! She seems to resonate the most with us readers. However, I would love to see more POV's from both of them. I want to see what Steph/Damien is seeing and what they are thinking. Like I said earlier, I think you should use some more descriptive words. Since it was only 4 parts, there wasn't much room to see changes in the character, but please, please tag me when you update.

Rate- 9/10

Blurb- Very good job on the blurb! You described Damien perfectly, though I would've wanted some insight on what Steph is like. I also liked how you provided a section of the chapter in the blurb as well...good job on choosing which section to copy there. It captures the attention of the reader right away.

Rate- 9.5/10

Overall- So very good job on what you have so far! Please, please tag me when you update! With a little editing and tweaking, you should have a final good piece. Use more descriptive words and try to make the reader feel like the main characters. Maybe edit your cover to make it fit the vibe of the story more as well.

Final rate- 70/100