Reviewed by: ChristineAcedon

Book Title: Champagne Life

Author's Name: 7Bibliophile3

Cover: 10/10

Love the cover. Everything about it is perfect. The contrast in the different fonts for the title, the black background with that class of champagne half hidden...it looks great.

Title: 10/10

Your title is short, cute, and gives us an idea of what your characters are striving for. I think you chose the perfect title for your work.

Blurb/Description: 8/10

You introduce your characters well and even highlight what is bound to be a major issue between Kyra and Reyansh (Reyansh's plan for revenge), but I would also like to know the stakes. What do they stand to lose? I like your description of Kyra turning him from a wolf to a her German Shepherd, however, I feel that it already sets our expectation as the reader for the two of them to overcome the obstacles set in front of them. I'd prefer a bit more left up in the air as we read through for them.

Creativity and originality: 10/10

While the idea of love and revenge has been done countless times, you put your own spin on that and I look forward to reading more of your story. Reyansha clearly has a plan when it comes to how he will utilize Kyra in his plan for revenge. It will be interesting to watch everything play out between the two of them as the story progresses.

Plot and Flow: 16/20

In lieu of having dialogue at the moment, there seems to be quite a bit of summarizing going on throughout the story. Explaining what was done and summarizing the conversation that was had without actually showing us that dialogue in the moment.

In the first chapter, I like the stark contrast between Reyansh and Kyra; love and money, hope and bitter hatred...it gives us a quick glimpse into their characters before the story really kicks off. One thing that really threw me off in the first chapter was how quickly it shot from first person to third person without any sort of indication that it would be doing so.

You seem to have the plot mapped out well in your head, which is always a benefit to a story, however, I would like to see more of the story in the present instead of having it summarized to me.

Character Development: 20/20

You don't rely on summaries for the character development, you show us through their actions. Early on, you can already see Reyansh's dedication to his family; his loyalty and his love. Even with Kyra, you get to see her prioritizing others over herself when it could wind up being life and death for her. Their actions early on speak volumes and really set up readers' expectations when it comes to the two of them. Well done.

Writing style: 17/10

My biggest issue with the style is, again, the summarizing that goes on throughout the story. You do well at portraying the feelings and thoughts of your characters, as well as what's important to them. Going in and showing the readers what is happening while it is happening would really improve the story overall, in my opinion.

Grammar, spellings, etc.: 6/10

There are a number of grammatical errors that I noticed throughout, the main issues being with dialogue punctuation, commas and run-on sentences. In chapter four, the first paragraph has the perfect example of a run-on sentence.

Some things to keep in mind when handling dialogue between characters:

- Punctuation goes in the quotation marks and not outside of it if nothing else is being said. For example;

o He said, "I don't appreciate having to clean up after your dog."

o INSTEAD OF: He said, "I don't appreciate having to clean up after your dog".

- When speaking, if the sentence should end with a '.' there should be a comma instead IF you add who is speaking. For example;

o "I let the dog out this morning before I left for work," Shay informed him.

- When speaking, if you introduce who is talking before the dialogue, there should be a comma before the quotations. For example;

o Peter replied, "Well he still peed in the kitchen. I had to clean it up and we were out of paper towels."

Overall: 87/100

You have an interesting and exciting story, your characters are relatable and people that readers can connect with. Work more on writing at the moment and take some time to edit for grammatical errors when you have the time. I look forward to reading more. 

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