Reviewed by: sapphire_seas

Book Title: A Battle of invisible Thorns; Part 1 of Rise of Midnight.

Author name: Swanangel15

Note: This review contains spoilers.

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Title: 3/10

The title is a mouthful, and gives the impression of a fantasy book, whereas it's not. Although I do see how it could relate, I think changing it to something a bit more appropriate (more of an overlooked sense, reciprocating the MC feelings, eg: Outshined etc) would be an improvement.

Cover: 4/10

The title doesn't relate to the story, although it does give a highschool vibe, it doesn't match the title or plot. Also, you should add your name/username.

Blurb: 6/10

The blurb gives info on the plot, and yours was quite good, but it could be elaborated further and fix a few grammatical errors.

Plot/Pacing: 9/10

Your plot is really original and how Alexis is a victim of superficial appearances and understands that it doesn't matter. It's very deep and emotional and I almost cried. And though I do like how you start from the very beginning, try adjusting the time during which things occur in the book.

Originality/Creativity: 6.5/10

Main Character: 10/10

Alexis is a deep and emotive character. I like how you build her up and her rooted belief that it's what's beneath the exterior that matters. 😌

Grammar: 8/10

There are quite a few small typos. Eg: Capital letters in the wrong places, and too many commas. But otherwise, the writing is great!

Enjoyableness: 7/10

Overall, this book was really good. It was expressive and empowering, and I really admired the MC. If you just correct the few errors and adjust the pacing slightly, that would really improve it! 🌺

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