Now I am the last to criticize grammar. But there are points i will bring up.

Seriously if you want me to know you oc is talking there is one sure fire way.
Yes your teacher showed you all these, if not your still in elementary school.
It's called quotation marks...
That's right funny marks at beginning and end of speech
" <------ looks like that

So many Rper's can't take a hint an use them but really

"Help!" Sally cried while holding the dying Claec

Is more obvious when she is speaking then.....

Help Sally said holding Claec

Note the punctuation helps too.

The next issue is out of character chat.
Now I love it at times but sometimes you can't tell if it's in or out of character.
And why?
Because they use no symbols to tell us it is out of character.

Now this can easily be solved with......

( ) , [ ], { },  that's right brackets and parenthesis. If you do not make it clear you are speaking in or out of character, then don't get huffy cause no body can tell

(hey i had pancakes) Myst kissed Shenra tenderly
Or
Hey i had pancakes. Myst kissed Shenra tenderly. 

Its that big a difference in a rp.
We need to know whom is speaking to react properly. Or if its all in character.

Please please make use of these tools if you are not already.
If you can't please apologize to your elementary teacher for wasting her time.