Author: rikaaraji468

Book: To Charm a Knight

So here we are, diving headfirst into the world of To Charm a Knight. Before we even start reading, I'm already lowkey curious, but also slightly skeptical-because, let's be real, we all know what's coming. A knight. A damsel. A whole lot of charming. But, honey, do we really need another story where some girl bats her lashes and has a guy swooning over her in five seconds?

Now, I'm not saying the author didn't try to spice it up... but something tells me this book's gonna leave me wishing for more than just a knight who "can't resist her charm." Let's buckle up, because we're about to roast... I mean, read this like the critical readers we are.

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So, we've got a giant dragon terrorizing four kingdoms for two weeks, but the knights and gods are just chillin' while it burns stuff down? Then, out of nowhere, a griffin swoops in with "unfathomable" powers (because several powers weren't enough). The dragon's defeated with some icy feathers and a little fire, and suddenly the kingdom gets "blessed" with all kinds of magical gifts. Honestly, it's like watching a big, over-the-top fight scene in a fantasy movie where everyone's too busy showing off powers to think straight. But hey, it's epic, right? For the prologue it's not too bad.

Alright, here's the roast in a nutshell:

Claire's out here acting like she's on some grand adventure, but sis can't even navigate the capital without getting lost three times. She's stumbling around, smiling like a lost puppy, and somehow still thinks she's doing great. The poor constable looks like he's about to hand her a map and a "Welcome to Reality" guidebook. And her big moment of finding the messenger office? Yeah, no. She's basically just taking a scenic tour of every wrong street. This girl's got the navigation skills of a headless chicken.

This is the type of scene where everyone's acting like they're in a soap opera. Raziel's trying to be all mysterious and brooding, but honestly, he just seems like the guy who'd get his feelings hurt if his hair wasn't perfect after a fight. Cassandra's acting like she's got her life all together, but we all know she's just another "I'm not like the other girls" type who's secretly in love with drama. And can we talk about how "assassination attempts" are just a casual Tuesday for them? Girl, this is too much.

Also the 4th chapter, Girl, this was like reading an entire episode of "The Struggles of Claire and Joan!" The whole thing had the energy of a "will they, won't they find a job" plotline with Claire trying to make a living while Joan's basically her hype girl. The constant rejections are giving me secondhand embarrassment, and the whole "I'll think about it" when Joan's offering a loan? Girl, you're in a city of textile chaos, not a soap opera! I get the optimism, but at some point, you just have to wonder if Claire's been walking the streets of "no" for a bit too long.

Okay, bestie, let's talk about Marcus. This man just waltzes in, all grown up and shiny, like he's auditioning for the "rich and cold knight" role in a drama. But wait-has he forgotten how to have a basic conversation? Every sentence he spits feels like a page out of a "How to Be a Jerk" handbook. First, he talks down to Claire for daring to chase her dreams, and then he has the audacity to question her direction in life like he's the compass to her heart. Excuse me, sir, you're not just a knight now; you're a walking pile of ego. Not to mention, that "Sir Marcus" moment? As if we couldn't tell by the ever-present chip on his shoulder. And then he walks away after ruining her entire self-esteem-classic. His harsh words are like daggers, but you really went overboard by hammering those insecurities back into Claire's chest. Overall, girl, Marcus is a classic case of "Let me break you down, and then show off my knightly status." If I were Claire, I'd be over here like, "You're still a boy in a man's body, and I'm not here for it."

That dude SCREAMS RED FLAG!!!

Your writing gives us the drama (and some very potent emotional blows), but let's polish it like Claire's sewing skills!

Now review time Mama!!!

World-Building

The city feels vast and overwhelming, aligning with Claire’s struggles. A bit more sensory detail could enhance immersion.

Grammar

Mostly solid, but there are minor errors like missing spaces and awkward phrasing. A quick proofread would polish it further.

Character

The characters are well-written, with clear emotions and realistic interactions. Their struggles and conflicts keep the story engaging.

Overall, a compelling story with strong character dynamics and a decent sense of place!

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Thank you so much for sharing this book! It's clear you've poured a lot of emotion and depth into these characters, and it definitely comes through in the tension-filled interactions. Keep pushing those boundaries and developing the characters even further - you've got something really special here. Can't wait to see where you take it next! Keep up the great work! 💖

Ps. You've got a great story. I'm seriously hooked on.
5/5 stars.
Also,
Please don't take this seriously as this is meant for fun.