The Phoenix Prophecy

By:  PaigeCunha22

Genre: Urban Fantasy

Rating: 4.25/5

Reviewer:  ThoughtfulSushi

Review:

You weren't kidding when you said you wrote with a great deal of description! It's evident that you have taken the time deliberately choose the way every sentence is formed down to every last word. I'm absolutely baffled how you have managed to make every sentence have a purpose!

Initially, I found myself intrigued by the prologue. I was curious who 'he' was, who he had come for and why. I love the urban fantasy vibe going on in the first two chapters. The hints at something lurking and truths being concerned by parents. The ratio between the dialogue and environmental explanation is balanced I feel.

When I got to chapter 3 and we entered the fantasy realm I was a bit confused. I ended up reading the passage after their spar three times before I partially understood what was being described. It looks like you are aiming for a more whimsical type of description of the realm, which is a fantastic idea! I do caution that if mountains are getting up and walking it may not be a good idea to describe a land with overly magical descriptions. It could be difficult for readers to distinguish between what is a description and what is the reality in this magical land.

You put an enormous amount of effort into this work! I'm really excited to see how this prophecy unfolds and who it's about!