Obsidian

By Siennafrost

Genre: Low Fantasy

Rating: 🌻🌻🌻🌻🌻

Review:

Your cover is absolutely stunning and is very intriguing! Djari is a great character and I love the whole Brave thing you have going on.

The opening scene was so sad and did a great job at creating this dark atmosphere and dramatic tone for the rest of the story. Your writing is beautiful with little to no grammatical errors and flowed nicely. I wanted to mention that the beginning of chapter 2 started with 'She' and I think it would be better if you used her name instead so it made it easier for readers to keep track of characters.

I would say that some of your paragraphs are fairly large and on Wattpad, you're going to want to have smaller paragraphs for more comments and easier reading. This is just what I've found to be effective for receiving more reads.

Overall, your story is beautifully captivating and the world you created is truly astonishing and in depth. I would definitely continue reading.