Game of Mass Destruction

By: chloboshoka

Genre: Dystopian Sci-Fi

Reviewer: ThoughtfulSushi

Rating: 3/5

Review:

By reading the description it's easy to know what to expect from this book. Hunger Games on steroids. Your book is definitely mature so I'd mark it that way.

The flow is most chapters is a bit off. The dialogue between characters is great but actions are an afterthought it seems. It's hard to find a balance between dialogue and character action. I would read through and add description will help improve the overall flow.

The grammar is a bit inconsistent and that also tires into the flow. Kiki's Poem started very strong but as the chapter went on the grammar slowly declined. I know I felt awkward updating all the time, felt like I was annoying my readers BUT updating often helps you climb the tag ranks and be seen.

I love that you have incorporated so many diverse backgrounds in your contestants. With so many different nationalities it's important to make sure they are defined. As it stands now the only one with a firm personality is Sia. I struggle with the same thing and again it takes a lot of edits to keep characters consistent.

Overall this book has great potential, just needs some love like all great novels have received.