Review of Not Your Regular by TemmyTgirl

This book takes you through the journey of Steve and Linda as they narrate how their love life came to be, taking the readers along with them.

COVER 📘

Your cover is nice. It isn't filled with lots of bright colors that some author's used to catch readers attention, it was a plain color and was also beautiful. The font choice was nice, nicely showing the title and author's name.

TITLE 📘

I like the title you choose for your book, at first I was like...

"Not your Regular?"

...but while reading the first four chapters of your book, I understand while you choose that. You were talking about how the love relationship between Linda and Steve didn't go around like how many other relationships came to be, nice title choice.

BLURB 📘

Now, in your blurb I think you should write a bit more of what the story entails rather than just a scene you picked out from the book. Yes, the scene is beautiful and draws readers in, but I feel a blurb should be more than that, a blurb is the short— yet descriptive account of the book that goes on the back cover.

Every blurb should have a primary conflict, your primary conflict is what draws your readers, intrigues them to want to scroll through those pages of your book. Your blurb is what shows your readers that this particular book is for them.

PUNCTUATION/GRAMMER 📘

Firstly, I will have to commend you on your grammar, good job girl. The four chapters I read I hardly saw any grammatical errors. If there were any, they should be few and I hardly noticed.

Although there were words like

His face seemed rather familiar when I had seen him.

I don't think the word rather is necessary there. It could be written

Now wonder his face seemed familiar when I saw him earlier.

Or where you said

The one who grabbed my waist.

Should be written as

The one who had grabbed me by my waist.

But your grammars were nice, good work.

Your punctuations is something you should work on, especially with the use of commas and fullstops.

First thrilling fact was I finally got to know her name. Linda.

The noun Linda isn't a sentence, after the name, what should be there should be a comma.

First thrilling fact was I finally got to know her name, Linda.

Also, mistakes with the commas and fullstops written at the end of the sentence.

When a dialogue ends with a tag which states actions, example.

"I told her the truth." She said using her handkerchief to dry the tears which were already looking at her eyes.

You use a full stop, but when saying things like.

"I told her the truth." She said.

Then you use a comma. Commas are only to be used when an action doesn't follow after the dialogue.

Also, punctuation marks aren't used after an exclamation point or a question mark.

"Can I please have a word with you?,"

That comma shouldn't be there.

Also, work more on your exclamation points for clarity.

DESCRIPTION 📘

Descriptions isn't just about writing your characters thoughts down or explaining to the readers their actions. It is also about there physical state, the emotions going through them while they were doing a particular action, their physical appearance.

Did Linda bite her lips and look away when she was left alone with Steve?

Could she hold eye contact with him?

I got more of Steve explaining how Linda reactions or Linda explaining Steve's. But they didn't really talk about there own state while in the presence of the other. I would like to get more of how Linda or Steve actually felt in the other presence.

Also, I didn't really get an image of how they looked, all.I got from Steve was that he was cute and had brown hair. I have no idea how Linda looks like.

Writers show there readers how there characters look like either by

Making the characters tell the readers

Or

Making other characters explain to the readers.

I prefer using the latter, which ever one you do, work more on that.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT 📘

So this was pretty good, at least in chapter 4, I was able to understand your characters and flow along with them. I like how you didn't add any character that didn't have a particular goal in the book.

Juan was the character that made Linda and Steve to meet again, through her everyday partying.

Bryan was the character that finally got them to talk and know there names.

And Susan, the ex-girlfriend, who Steve started dating again, may be the one to cause drama, I am still in chapter 4 so I don't know much.

But good work in making your readers understand your characters.

OVERALL IMPRESSION 📘

The way you started your book, should be rewritten, I am talking about the first paragraph. You were speaking from Linda's POV and you said

We're getting married next week...

It would be better if you had said

My wedding to Steve would take place next week.

Steve and I were getting married next week.

Or even

I am getting married to Steve next week.

Because at that point in time, your readers don't know "we" if you understand what I am saying.

Also, did Joan really go to party every night? You said she literally went to party every night. I know there are party freaks out there but I don't think they go to party every night.

You should remove the literally, and just put she went to party every night. Your readers would understand you are exaggerating but also get the fact that she is a party freak.

Also, when Linda and Bryan were eating, you said they *Literally* had lunch together. There is no need for the literally in that sentence, them having lunch together is just fine.

I wrote this from the first four chapters and you should be able to see where you were good and your errors.

You have a really nice plot going on and your book is a good recommendation for young adults. Good work dear.

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This review is to help you and nothing more, wishing you the best.