@_IrisWrites_  

Title/Cover: I've got no real problem with your title or cover, but they do sort of lack the wow factor. It's not that neither are bad; they're just a bit bland and very similar to many others in your genre, especially on Wattpad. Also, the title font is nice, but it totally covers up your byline, so I'd fix that (you want people to see your name!) 

Grammar: Two things: tense and quotation marks. Your book is written in past tense, but sometimes you shift into present. For example, "Although Desiree IS considered an adult, she WAS never too old for her mom's kisses." Luckily, this doesn't happen all that much, but it's definitely something to keep an eye out for when you revise. "As for quotation marks, you end a lot of dialogue like this." She said. "When it should actually be like this," she said. The former example would mean that the "she said" is part of a different sentence. (The Internet or myself can provide further clarification on this if you need it). 

Characters: I don't get a lot from Desiree yet, but so far she seems like she has a good head on her shoulders. She loves her mom and seems like a pretty good, responsible kid. She seems very average, and obviously loves her friends enough to brave Chipotle (which is some real dedication in my opinion). 

Dialogue: Not too shabby since the girls say "you guys" about as much as I do lol. If anything, it's a bit boring so far because the conversations are very everyday and aren't really driving the story forward much except to introduce us to characters. I think replacing all the "hi good to see you how are you" stuff might be a good move (but to be fair I've been reading A Game of Thrones, so I've gotten quite used to literally every conversation being about murder or kings or both, which is very much not the case in your story). I would also say that personally, I'm not a fan of dialogue tags like "questioned" and "stated". I do appreciate and encourage you trying to change it up a bit, but "said" will usually draw less attention to itself. 

Plot and pacing: So far, I have no idea what your plot is. By now, I should have some inkling, but all I've been able to discern is that Desiree is a senior in high school. Your blurb tells me a boy will come along, but other than that I'm blind. I think a big thing you could do to fix this would be to combine some of your chapters since they're currently very short. I'm not sure what the word count is, but for Wattpad, 1500-2000 per chapter is where you should more or less be aiming. This would also speed up your pacing, because three chapters of getting ready for school and going to Chipotle and then going to school can be a bit boring. A reader will be much more forgiving towards just one chapter of this and then your inciting incident relatively quickly. 

Personal enjoyment: To be perfectly honest, I was a bit bored. Three short and frankly uneventful chapters weren't really enough to hook me into the story. Again, I think if you'd been quicker to get to the action or combined these chapters into just one or maybe two, I'd have been a bit more interested, but personally I wasn't invested in the characters or the story yet. But do keep in mind that I'm a stranger on the Internet and my opinion is my own. Feel free to reach out with any questions you may have! Hope you found this review helpful!