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Title: I like the title! The story does seem to be a tale about a princess, so it fits well enough. It's got a nice enough ring to it, and for me the only complaint would be that calling it a tale makes it seem a bit more folk-y than it is. I'm no expert on titles, though, so that was just my impression. 

Grammar: Your grammar flows pretty well for the most part. However, I did catch a lot of "This." she said, instead of "This," she said. Make sure to watch out for that. Also, there were a few sentences that really tripped me up in terms of how they're phrased. For example, in Chapter 2 you write, "With her light footsteps and Aahil's heavy boots, they strode with steady footsteps towards the gardens..." and then later, "Everyone screamed at the top of their voices." In Chapter 3 you say "pulling down our economy unbelievably." These are all fine grammatically, but for me they were a bit of a snag while I was reading. Really, this is a nitpicky style thing, but if phrases like these seem weird to you upon rereading, it might be something to take note of when you edit. 

Characters: So far, Shyra is our only developed character. No one else has really been around enough for me to tell whether they're going to become important, which is fine for now. I can tell that Shyra is kind and really cares about her people, and can be a bit mischievous in the ways she advocates for them. She seems smart and likable enough, and as an MC she functions quite nicely. I'm definitely interested to see where she goes. 

Dialogue: I had the same issue with dialogue that I mentioned in the grammar section. The characters sometimes use words that just don't really flow. Again though that really might just be the way I'm reading. I did think your dialogue was a bit formal, but since your character is a princess, you could argue that it makes sense because she would have been raised to be well-spoken. However, even when your dialogue was just banter it could be quite stilted, so when you edit that might be another thing to look for. 

Plot and pacing: I really don't know what the plot is yet, so I don't have much to say about it, but you're laying the framework for the story quite nicely. I enjoyed the touches of Indian culture you've put into this world and the conflict between all these different peoples happening in the background. I appreciate you scattering all these little world building details around instead of infodumping them all right away, but I felt like some things were sort of mentioned and then skipped over and that left me a little confused. I'd say if you want the reader to remember something that's going to become important, it might merit a little explanation since a lot of the smaller details were sort of lost on me. Your pacing right now feels a bit slow since it's taken three chapters to get through a relatively small chunk of time and we haven't gotten our inciting incident yet, so the plot hasn't really started. This is a style choice and of course not all books have to have an inciting incident within three chapters, but if it takes too long you could lose the reader's interest. That said, it seems like you're setting up for a pretty epic story and it's totally okay to take some time to acclimate the reader to this drastically different world. Again, though, beware of losing the reader's attention by going too slowly. 

Personal enjoyment: I think you have all the components of a really good book here, which is why this review is short and nitpicky. Grammar is good, I like the world, and I think you've got some good things brewing for Shyra. It's got some unique touches and overall is very interesting. Personally, though, I had a bit of trouble getting into it. It could be because I've been sick and demotivated, but something about it just didn't click for me. But that's me being super subjective. There were very few specific things for me to dislike, so I'll say it was a personal thing. Again, I think this is a really promising book overall. 

Hopefully this review was somewhat helpful for you! Do keep in mind that I'm here as a fellow writer and as a reader, not a professional critic, so all of this is my own personal opinion. If a suggestion doesn't feel right, don't feel obligated to take it. You know your story best. I'm happy to help if you have any questions or things I missed! Thanks so much for choosing me to review your story!