“Forced To Be An Alpha”
By: Ayten_2004

🐾Cover: 5/5- This is a beautiful cover, I love the color scheme and how the wolf stands out.

🐾Description: 8.5/10- It needs some editing for grammar and punctuation. I suggest adding a glimpse of an important scene to pull readers in.

🐾Grammar & Punctuation: 11/20- There are a lot of run on sentences. I notice one was 33 lines without stopping, that could be 10+ sentences. Another was 21 lines without punctuation. Some paragraphs can be broken down into 2-3 instead of one long one. A lot of dialogues are missing punctuation at the end. Some sentences start with lower case and they need to be uppercase. The long run on sentences is the major issue that needs editing. Your grammar isn't horrible, it just needs edited.

🐾Originality: 4/5- There are a lot of Alpha stories, but you put your own twist and feel onto it. Great job!

🐾Character Development: 16.5/20- Tyler is so relatable! Try to add in each character's physical features and age. Try to make readers envision your characters, because actual paper books don't have pictures. Make sure to keep letting their personalities shine, you do a good job at this.

🐾Plot Development: 19/20- The plot is interesting from the moment Tyler wakes up from a nightmare. Even though this is a wolf story it is relatable. It has good flow and stays in the same tense.

🐾Overall Look: 7/10- There is some clutter. The paragraph with 33 lines had me confused, I had to re read it twice because it is jumbled.

🐾Enjoyment: 8.5/10- This is a good start to your story. I do suggest editing. Try the grammar keyboard or other web sites that can assist you. I did really like your story, it's very interesting and intriguing.

🐾TOTAL: 79.5/100

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🐾91.5 POINTS🐾

★To Ayten_2004 ★

Thanks for requesting a review. I enjoyed reading and reviewing your book. Keep up the good work.

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