@theamateurwriter1

C O V E R

6- 10

The cover was a bit plain, and was not very grabbing so there's is room for improvement. However I did feel like it captured the idea your book was portraying, the linked hands symbolizing unity and the especially the light at the back representing the title. Overall, it was a good cover, just not particularly riveting enough.

O R I G I N A L I T Y / P L O T

10 - 10

I think you're the first person I've scored with such a high number of points on originality + plot so well done for that! I thought it was absolutely unique and your storytelling held me from start to finish. Lemme just say all the things I completely and utterly loved about your plot:

1) You were able to display fully justified arguments for both sides of why people believe being LGBTQ is wrong, and why people think it's right. This is usually hard for people, as normally they show their clear bias, but I thought you did this wonderfully.

2) Your story was told in the POV of someone disagrees with being LGBTQ, and not in the POV of the person who's trying to change them. Usually, it's the main character who is the "saviour" or the person who can help "change their ways," but I liked how it was written with the other person's thoughts and feelings in mind.

3) Things were not stereotypical. The popular bad boy was gay and even he was annoyed at the fact that people have a certain assumption for gay people.

Those were just a few of the things I thought we're great, and it's a book I will most likely want to read further than the three chapters I set out to read.

SPaG

6 - 10

To a normal reader, they probably wouldn't notice any mistakes as most are very small. However, as a reviewer, mistakes are what I'm looking for and there were a few to many in your book. Check over your work after reading it, especially at the end of your chapters as that's where a lot of your spelling errors lie. Also check over your dialogue points, e.g. "Go to sleep," said Dad.

Notice how the comma comes after the word but before the speed o marks. You could put any punctuation point there but make sure it's before the speech marks as it's an easy mistake to make, but it's still a little off putting.

Overall though, your SPaG wasn't too bad, as I was able to read your story smoothly without stopping every few seconds. 

D E T A I L / D E S C R I P T I O N S
 
5 - 10

I didn't see many descriptions, there were a few but not much. One or two more descriptions and your book would be an even better story than it already is, as you readers will then be able to see what you see properly.

P R E S E N T A T I O N

7 - 10

Usually I don't really like stories with short paragraphs, but somehow you made it work. Instead of the paragraphs making me feel disengaged, they made me want to read even more. Your structure and presentation was good, longer chapters may be a little better, but overall it all seemed good to me.

O V E R A L L

34 - 50