Hotsnow01

C O V E R

7-10

I loved the image used for your cover, I feel like it suited all the themes and ideas of your book perfectly, however the font felt a little blocky to me. Maybe a slightly more cursive font, one more fancy. Or just one a bit more heavy if you're looking for a more serious look. If you want any suggestions feel free to ask. Other than that, it was a very pretty cover that would surely grab any reader's attention.

O R I G I N A L I T Y

9-10

I don't think I've ever read a book like yours here before, it was a pretty unique one! Your opening was certainly like nothing I had ever read before and had me intrigued from start to finish. You created so many emotions and a beautiful scene in the prologue which was very captivating.

The orphan thing is quite overused, but I do feel like it was necessary to your plot. I loved the whole school idea, that was very original and I loved all the magical aspects too! Well done! ♥

S P A G

5-10

There were quite a lot of grammatical errors in your story, which can disinterest your reader so it's important to fix those as soon as possible. Your beautiful writing skills did manage to distract me from them at points, but there were moments when they were a little too excessive. However, I've noticed you have hired an editor, who seems to be really good at their job, so I'm sure your book is only going to go up.

D E T A I L S /  D E S C R I P T I O N S

8-10

I looooooved your descriptions, they had just the right amount of detail in them to make them intriguing and enthralling for the reader. In the beginning, I was able to easily visualise the scene, and that's the way it carried on throughout. There were some times where there was a little too much detail, and scenes where you could done a little more showing rather than telling. But overall, they were brilliantly written and I enjoyed reading them.

P L O T

6.5-10

From where I read up too (3 chapters, as for everyone's books) I didn't get to see much of the plot, which of course isn't your fault. But for me it felt a little flat at times. BUT I did love your whole story idea, as it is a very unique one. The plot was interesting and I'm sure your book gets better as you progress through the chapters.

O V E R A L L

35.5-50