Start off with the Cover!!!

Main Image - I'm just not into this cover. I could see that the drawing has so many problems. The hand is damaged. I could see lines on the model's face. Hair definitely needs some conditioner. Lighting needs fixing since the hand is illuminated.

I'll show a bit of what I mean by myself even though I'm not an expert on Anime yet.

Might not be the best but at least I demonstrated what I mean by the problems! Overall 4.09/10.

Title - At first sight, this title got me scratching my head and searching on Google for hours. Only the sub title convinced me that it's English. I did understand the meaning after reading so much and it's actually pretty cool. The title's style is good but the subtitle needs to match with it. I'll give it a 6.02/10.

Description -

Good description even though it wasn't... Attracting. I promise, It's good! But there's that spice that makes people want to start the book... Something like the combination of excitement and suspense. It should hype them up to start reading the book!

The no.1 tip I could give you in this is to add emotion into the description. Something that makes people care about the protagonist, makes them want to know what happens next. And I'm sure if you put a little thinking into this, I'm sure you'll make a great description.  6.89/10.

Onto the story!!!

First Impression on Chapter 1 - Impressive in the beginning, as it already gave me all the information I THOUGHT I needed on Bothyner. Although I do wish the information was presented through the conversation of characters or maybe through memories. It'll do in your way, it's already very interesting.

BUT! Around one part of the chapter, I got completely off-track with Lyos' (the deuteragonist's) birth. I couldn't understand anything they said about his powers and anything to do with his health. Sorry, but maybe tweak a little around how the powers work, cause that part really makes me feel dumb.

Around the Bothyner Academy though, things had gotten really interesting and made me continue on reading to the next chapter (even though confusion still hits me with a few blows). So as an academy is an academy, maybe add some info on how the powers work through the teachers to understand more about them. Overall, it just didn't make the 1st impression much...
4.89/10

Overall Writing on the 1st 3 chapters - even though the 1st didn't make a good hit, the 3rd chapter really turned the tables! I'm so interested in reading now that I saw something that's at stake in the story! Because of the 3rd chapter... Imma make the score better... 6.89/10.

Total marks - 28.78/50

Rate from 5 - 2.87/5 - Needs a bit of work...

I hope you took/will consider taking all my advice and put it in use, I'm going to continue reading just to see the end of Lyos' journey. No personal feelings are in this and I hope to see your book improve, animahez...