Book Title: Somewhere Between Love and Revenge

Author: GraceMorgan1123

Reviewer: Read-aholic2006

•°•°•°•°•°•°•(NOTE: This review is only based on the first 5 chapters. )•°•°•°•°•°•°•

Title: 5/5

Your title is both fitting and intriguing.

Cover: 3/5

Your design isn't bad at all, but what bothers me the most is the placement of your name; rather shift it to the top center or the left corner of your cover. Then there's the picture—it's neither informative or magnetic in my opinion.

Blurb: 2/5

Even when writing a blurb—please watch your grammar! As for your extract, which randomly appears at the very end of your book's description, I encourage you to shorten it and also move it to the start of your blurb, so it serves as the parting curtains for your "performance". And I know you didn't want to spoil anything for your readers, but if you want to effectively capture the attention of your target audience, then you need to reveal a little more information than what you've sprinkled into the few paragraphs you were willing to offer. 

Creativity/Originality: 5/5

The concept of your story seems to have been born entirely of your own imagination.

Plot/Flow: 9/10

Your pacing is fine, but I would have preferred it if you opened your story with the car crash incident, diving straight into the good stuff. The scene with which you chose to lead your narration is enlightening, but not really exciting. You can still mention the cooking lessons later in your book and start everything off with a bang instead.

Characters: 8/10

I already found the female protagonist to be annoying in the first chapter—the girl's got ungrounded anger issues. But then again, that is how she's supposed to be, so I cannot hate her for it. Now, I have reiterated this popular tip to quite a few writers before and I'll gladly say it again: Show—don't tell. Your characterization needs to be more subtle. In Chapter 1, you conspicuously state (more than once) that Luther is an introvert instead of illustrating those reticent qualities through dialogue, actions or natural narration. The same goes for Dixon and even Anton when you describe what he is like in Chapter 3 in relation to his PA. Carefully BLEED that information into your story; don't just toss it in.

On a sweeter note, your dialogue is delightfully humorous.

Writing style/grammar: 4/10 

Your grammar mistakes leak into comma splices, missing punctuation (omission of necessary apostrophes, commas, question marks and full stops), capitalization errors, using the erroneous form of a word (for example, a verb instead of an adverb) and switching tenses. Although there isn't really anything deeply off-putting about them, some of your descriptions simply don't sit right with me. Like in Chapter 2: Though he didn't know her, he could tell that she was an interesting lady; the nonchalant look, the confident walking steps, her feisty self...That sentence right there could be altered to read as follows: He had never seen her in his entire life, but with a single glance, he could tell that she was an interesting character. With her nonchalant countenance, confident gait and the fierce manner with which she handled the man, he knew she could twist anyone's arm with a mere flash of her teeth.

And here's a little reminder that you are not writing a play. So, when a character gets slapped, do not literally insert the verb "slap" between two asterisks; you can just write: He flung his arm forward, striking her across the face.

My final piece of advice: Italicize any flashbacks instead of writing the memory in quotation marks.

Genre relevance: 5/5

You've got the romance genre locked in nicely, with themes of murder and revenge. Oh, and I also love the found family trope.

Reading enjoyment: 5/10

No comment. (My review speaks for itself.)

Overall thoughts and extra comments: 46/65

With patient editing, this story will surely reach magnificent heights. Keep going. Keep writing.