Title

The title is very apt and catchy. I like it, and it fits the book perfectly. It's easy to remember, and it rolls very nicely off of the tongue. Good titles will always make the reader wonder what comes next, and this one surely did!

When I read the book for some reason the title wasn't mentioned in the wattpad list. You might have been using a different font. I suggest you change that because if I am encountering such a problem, others might as well.

Cover

The cover is very nice, I think. It reflected the title in an obvious way. The quality of the background could be a little better, but I believe it was a self-made cover, so good job.

Description

The description was short and sweet but a little vague in my opinion. When I first read the description, my first thought was that the book would be about a social issue related to obesity. It's not that at all. I suggest you may want to change the words around a little bit so that what exactly the story is about is much clearer.

Plot and Characters

The plot itself is simple but very engaging. I have read some stories like this one before as well. What's different about this is your writing style. The story is written in the third person point of view, which tends to be a lot less common in recent stories. The characters are well thought out and very relatable. I resonate well with Victoria because of my personal experiences, and I think it's safe to say that more people will also find something in common with her. We are all a work in progress after all, just like the MC.

Overall Impression

The story isn't complete yet but I read all the chapters that were posted, and I will continue reading this story and enjoying all the cliché involved. The writing is great, and I did see one or two errors here and there, but as a whole, it was a great read. I have high hopes for this book once it's completed. Moreover, I don't usually like the cast that writer's do for characters to give them a solid appearance, but this one is well thought out, and I can perfectly imagine these people playing their roles. A bonus point for the diversity you have used in the stories.

Reviewed By: Sam from argorak