Title

The title for this book says it all really, The Elementals. I mean, just from reading the title, I've figured out what the book is going to be about so it is a giveaway. There's nothing about it that stands out, but it's a decent title to work with.

Cover

The cover is fairly standard, I wouldn't say it really goes with all the elements despite it having the symbols. The colour of the cover is a little unusual but a nice colour. However, I feel like it looks dull because the text and background are the exact same colour. You could try adding multiple colours to the cover maybe to brighten it up more. The text is very fancy and does stand out but, due to the background and text being same colour, this does make the title look unclear.

Blurb

The blurb is actually okay for this book. It doesn't scream at me to read the book. However, it is a book that I would give a chance at reading due to the blurb. For some reason, I quite like the fact that the characters are born with the symbols and letters. I would say to try and avoid rambling in the blurb. Instead, keep it short and sweet but effective enough to attract your readers.

First Chapter

The first chapter was long, and I noticed that this was because you were adding a lot of unnecessary information, like how Zena is changing her clothes and doing things which, as a reader, I don't really need to know unless it is going to majorly affect the plot. I would say that there's a lot of unnecessary information that either needs to shortened and summarised or needs to be removed so you could improve the plot instead. At first, I was not too keen on the chapter but, as I continued reading it, I did find myself enjoying it, especially the end part of the chapter because I wanted to read more.

Plot / Theme

The plot of the book is in early days but from what I have read, I can say it's not too bad. I like the fact that you're writing in each character's point of view. It helps me understand them more and see each event from a different perspective. The theme is mainly fantasy. However, I think there could be love in there as well between Zena and Alastair.

Writing

Your writing is standard in this book. You're able to construct sentences which are punctuated properly. However, you need to have another look at spelling and grammar because I saw a lot of typos in there. I would also say try to avoid dumping large amounts of information just to increase the number of words; use those words to strengthen and expand the plot instead.

Characters

My favourite character has to be Zena because she seems really cool, and I know this due to way you've portrayed her throughout the book. She seems to be a very likeable character, pretty stubborn too. Alastair seems like more of a gentle character, but at the same time he seems mysterious as well. I am hoping something happens between Zena and him whether that is friendship or more.

Overall Impression

The book something I would read if it was completed, of course, because I did enjoy reading the first chapter and exploring each character in their point of view. I feel like with some development in the plot and characters, you would be able to write a good book that is actually readable. Your writing style in this book is pretty good which made it easy to read it and not get bored half way through it.

Reviewed by: Pixie