Title

The title, straight away, makes me think of a cliche book because I've seen many books with similar titles. I don't, however, want to judge the book by its title because it's not too bad. The title does perk up my curiosity, though, as it leads me to wonder why on earth a mob boss would  need to go in disguise. Could he be in trouble or is this part of some plan?

Cover

I don't personally find the cover very attractive. I think this is because of the black and white images used which make it quite dull, combined with the fact that the text has no colour and doesn't really make up for it.

All I'm seeing are shades of black and white really. I'd consider getting a cover with a little more colour, the text could even remain black as long as the images brighten it up. The images used for the cover do fit the book and go along with the title.

Blurb

The blurb is a 50/50: the beginning of the blurb is what I really liked because you've introduced the main character and listed key details related to him. However, when I reached the part where his brother suggests a disguise and onwards, it felt more like you were telling me the story and spoiling it for me.

You've already spoken about his brother suggesting the disguise and then him meeting another woman and what happens afterwards. All of this information should be kept in the book and expanded on, not on the blurb as it is too much and it gives everything away to the reader. I would say to reconsider or shorten the second part of the blurb so it's not too much for a reader.

First Chapter

The first chapter does need a bit of improvement in terms of the information being dumped. You don't want to constantly throw information at a reader because they want to figure it out themselves. The chapter did give me a good insight into the life of Nikolia and what is expected of him by his parents and family.

Personally, I found the opening funny because I didn't expect a mob boss to be reading a twilight book and the fact that he compared himself to Bella at the end was comical as well.

Plot / Theme

The plot of the book did seem rushed at the first chapter because we already have Nikolia's brother suggesting the plan and I just felt like it was going really fast. I had literally been introduced to the characters and wanted to know more about them but instead I have one brother suggesting a plan and Nikolia agreeing with it.

I also feel like the rest of the book is going incredibly fast; it's like, one minute, he's gotten off the plane and, the next, he already wants to date a woman who he doesn't even know. There were definitely some funny parts in the book such as changing his name to Nicholos Solo which he thought of from star wars.

I'm not quite sure as to what kind of themes you were trying to show throughout the book. It did seem a little confusing so this could be something that you need to work on and consider.

Writing

Your writing had a lot of punctuation missing as well as grammar and spelling mistakes which did begin to put me off reading. Considering it's not a bad book, I'd say the lack of punctuation did let your work down. There was also a lack of descriptive language which would have made me enjoy reading the book more if you had included it.

Characters

Nikolai seems like a funny character. I did get to see some personality in him but it seems like his brothers take more control over him and make the decisions. I can definitely relate to him with the whole middle child situation as I'm one myself and it isn't cool at all being one so I understand the struggle there. For character development, there is work that needs to be done in terms of his emotions and what he's really like when he's away from his brothers.

Overall Impression

The book could be a good read if you develop the plot further and not rush it all. Your writing does need improvement or else it would be difficult to read the book as a reader and not get fed up due to the spelling and grammar typos or lack of vocabulary.

I do feel like it was the plot development that was a major let down, maybe I had high expectations and hope. The character development is not too bad but there's always room for improvement, of course.

Reviewed by: Pixie