Title

The title 'Broken Angel' makes me think that the main character may have some issues that could be personal and affect her deeply in many ways. I feel like the title is actually referring to the main character as a broken angel; she may want to do good in her life but isn't getting anywhere, or there may be a factor in her life that is doing more damage than good. It's an interesting title. It does make me think all sorts.

Cover

There is no book cover currently for this book so unfortunately I can't really speak much on that area. However, that doesn't mean I can't give you any feedback. When creating a book cover or going for one, you need to think about what elements you would like displayed on the cover. The colours used on the cover must be relevant to the mood and theme.

Try not to cram too many images and elements together but make sure you don't keep it too simple either. When going for a font, think about what colours are best suited with the cover as well as the font, and ensure that it is clear and an appropriate size.

Blurb

The blurb is very short and doesn't really tell us much apart from the fact that the main character has lost her father and that she'll run into trouble with the police. It is interesting because it does make me wonder how she's going to possibly get into trouble. I'm curious as to what kind of character Abbey is. Some feedback would be to try and add a little more detail as you don't want a three lined blurb which is very short. You need to add more without giving too much away to the reader.

First Chapter

The first chapter is not very interesting for me personally. All I have found out is that the main character, Abbey, has lost her father and she's basically signing some papers so she can inherit what's been left to her. I found it quite boring. There was nothing that seemed different or made me curious. It seemed very generic to me.

Some feedback would be to add some more information that will interest the reader. This could be about her relationship with her father or her past or something that makes the reader want more. It felt like a lot was missing from this chapter. It seemed rushed.

Plot / Theme

At the beginning, I found the first chapter incredibly boring, and I didn't want to read more, but for the sake of an honest review, I've got to, so I did. The second chapter surprised and interested me in a good way, as it seems as though Abbey has another side to her in which she and her friends were hacking into systems.

As I continued reading the book, I was quite impressed by the plot, and the idea behind it. However, I do feel like you can still develop your plot further as there are details that are missing. Try and make the idea more original, and try to include the theme of the book throughout your writing.

Writing

Your writing is okay, but I'll be honest, there's a lot of room for improvement. You're able to construct basic sentences. However, I would have liked to have seen descriptive language such as adjectives and adverbs in your sentences, as this would have them more interesting and less basic.

Spelling and grammar is something you need to go over within all your chapters as I did spot the odd few mistakes when reading the book. It is best to correct them, as they can drive away the readers and put them off if there are too many.

You've decided to write in third person, which is totally fine because each to their own, but it was a bit confusing for me. This is mainly because I'm not used to third person. That's all. I feel like you need to make your writing more exciting so it doesn't bore a reader, as you want to make them think about what's going to happen next.

Characters

Abbey seems like a very interesting character. I was curious to figure out more about her as I continued reading. It seemed like at first she was a normal girl, then some kind of hacker who eventually moves away from all of that onto something else. It's almost as if the book is about her journey and how she's discovering herself in a way.

Some feedback would be that I would have liked to have seen more of her personality. This can be shown throughout your writing or the dialogue even. I feel like you can try to develop her character a little more and show different sides of her, such as when she's very vulnerable. Her thoughts and feelings may change.

Overall Impression

The book does seem like it's rushed a little bit. It has a lot of improvement that it needs in terms of the writing, which would help you attract more readers and allow them to enjoy reading the book.

You could try to consider replanning your plot and taking time on each chapter so something interesting is occurring in each one. That way your readers would not get bored, and they'd be curious to what's going to happen next.

I feel like with the improvements and further developments made, it could be a good book. However, that is only if the book is improved and edited properly. It does seem like you're a fairly new writer, so I would say take as much advice and feedback as you can.

Reviewed by: Pixie