Title

Right off the bat, the title immediately intrigues me. Though I cannot be sure just what these bonds refer to, my main guess is that these bonds refer to friendship. In literature across the world, bonds have often been associated with friendship. However, bonds could also refer to marriage ones or the bonds of love and family. This interests me greatly as I can already imagine a grand tale beyond my initial scope.

However, it is the Breaking part that really catches my eyes. Bonds are not meant to be broken, or at least, are not wished to be broken. Hence, I am wondering, why exactly are these bonds being broken?
Is the struggle internal or external? What are the themes?
Will betrayal be involved?

I am not sure.

Cover

The cover looks beautiful and I can see how it would reflect the title. There isn't much unnecessary decorations and accessories to the cover. It is simple, straight to the point, and gives off a feeling of dread. I am not sure where you got this photo, it looks to me as if it is a photo that was taken from the internet. But wherever it may have come from, that doesn't erase the fact that the cover really suits the title and the story.

The font looks pretty good. I'm going to say that there are times when I couldn't see the font, but over all, I think it suits every and you shouldn't change the fonts at all. Additionally, I also noticed that your author name was almost flush with the margin. I had a hard time looking at it and I had no idea what it was saying. I suggest that you increase the size of the fonts for the author name and place it on the top of the cover if you cannot put it below the title. That way, it would be much more visible to the reader.

Blurb

Wonderful is the first word that enters my head when I read your glorious blurb. As cheesy as my lines are, I cannot get enough of it. Your blurb is simple and effective. It showcases your themes very well and it doesn't give away the ending or any of the fub stuff. The language used for the blurb is sufficient and readable. It is not too overly bland and cliche, rather it has substance and is intriguing.

I wouldn't change your blurb at all since that would simply just ruin it. Three times in a row and you have managed to astound me. I have no idea why your book doesn't have more reads. Though thee are certainly some issues that we will tackle later, I strongly believe that your book is worth reading by more people. You deserve more.

First Chapter

Granted, the first chapter introduces us to the main character and her love interest. I was rather surprised to know that this story takes place during the apartheid years. Apartheid has always been a fascinating subject as it is a great example of the injustices of human society. Set in England, I believe that the setting is simply brilliant. Hats off to you!

However, there were a few instances where I thought that maybe you could improve with the realism. By the tail-end of the chapter, there was this instant love that happened between Elizabeth and Joan. Granted, Elizabeth and Joan are still very young and infatuation is very common. However, it was very much phrases as if it were true love and as the story continues to progress, it is still phrased as true love.

I suggest altering this slightly to maybe having their attraction to each other grow over time instead of being an instant thing. It is completely fine to have your characters infatuated with one another. It happens in real life a lot of the times. However, it would be nice to add that touch of realism into the story by letting them discover that it is true love later on.

Other than that, I don't think there are any more issues with your first chapter. It is already hooking and definitely not boring. There were times when my attention was drawn out, but maybe it's because of the first person point of view, which I am not accustomed to. But that issue is completely with me and shouldn't hinder you at all. A lot of people read first person point of views, so it is no issue at all.

The Chapters That Follow

The next chapters get more and more interesting with each new problem that arises. Of course, as expected, people do react to finding out that Elizabeth is having a relationship with a black girl. Many say that this is not just immoral, but also illegal. I like that she continues to persevere for the sake of love.

There were several times when I thought that the main character was a little too naive. By that I mean that there were times when she acted too naive for me to bother to care about her. However, it did make sense, somewhat, afterall, she had always been naive since the first chapter. I do hope that maybe her naivety would have decreased as the chapters progressed. Additionally, I loved the mystery about who was really stalking Elizabeth.

I had many suspects in my mind, but to be honest, I really thought that it was her sister. In the end, I was right! So, yay! The ending was very, very emotional. I think that if the ending had gone another way, I think that the story would have lost its impact and its themes. Brilliant, good job! I commend you highly and I hope that you can produce more works for us to enjoy.

Characters

Elizabeth was a naive character. Thought I understand her fears and I understand her intentions, there were times when I simply wished that she would die. I don't usually wish that characters die… but when I do, that's either because I feel like they're too annoying. But that isn't to say that her change couldn't be seen
Thought the changes are miniature, Elizabeth does change with each chapter.

She doesn't feel like a Mary Sue nor do I think she's a Mary Sue. She is certainly a very innocent character, thrust into drama and betrayal. It is very explicit that she unit prepared for any of this, that she simply wishes to follow her heart. However, I feel as if the conflict between her lover and her family felt stale every now and then. There were times when it was obvious that she should have chosen her family's yet she chose her lover instead. These instances could have been the source for great drama, had they been properly developed and foreshadowed.

As for her sister, I think she might be suffering some sort of illness. I very much suspect that she was the one who poisoned their mother, and I think that it was confirmed in a later chapter. Her reasons for doing what she does seem to be centred around jealousy. In fact, she is very jealous and calculating. But still, I never imagined her to go as far as poison her own mother. It simply felt too far-fetched. Perhaps if you had foreshadowed this, I think that it would help in making the scene much more believable. Perhaps have Elizabeth recount how her sister used to you around with poisons and what-not. Anything to make her actions believable.

There is an obvious comparison between Elizabeth and her sister. I am not sure if this is intentional or not, but the comparison is here and it resulted in me wanting to find out more. There is so much conflict between them, but also no conflict. The sister is a petty little bish while Elizabeth is innocent and naive. They are almost like the character foils for each other. I really want to believe that this was intentional. 

Writing Style 

Your writing style is great and I love it. Though you could work on with the descriptions a tad bit more, your writing style really doesn't have much issues. I am not a big fan of first person point-of-view, but trust me, your writing is one of the better ones in Wattpad. 

Here's a thought, perhaps you could show more of Elizabeth's emotions in order for us to have the incentive to care for her. It is very important to show the emotions of the character to your audience while using your own individual style. We all have our own styles, my style isn't going to be like yours. Your style isn't going to be like mine. By having our own style that reflects us as individuals, we are setting ourselves apart from the plethora of other books in the industry.

I suggest that you look more into your own style and maybe research more about first person point-of-view. You can only improve from here. Just remember, you still have a long way ahead of you. Never give up and always remember that you can only reach success by both helping yourself and by accepting help from your friends.

Dialogue

The dialogue was mostly straight-forward. I had no problems with catching up and understanding what was said. None of them felt cliche and they all seemed pretty good. You really know what you are doing with the dialogue.

Perhaps the only thing I can suggest is maybe adding a little bit more colour to the words. Utilise similes, metaphors, hyperboles, and the likes. As much as we need to make our readers understand our dialogue, we also need to captivate them and surprise them. Using descriptive language is one way to captivate them.

Grammar

You really don't make many mistakes with grammar. I would say that your grammar is pretty good besides some of those issues that had already been pointed out in the comments. I would suggest that you look over your drafts and edit out those mistakes in order to really polish your story. 

Overall

I have read many books on Wattpad. I have to say, this is one of those undiscovered books that really deserve more recognition. You have an excellent plot and an excellent cast. There are still many things that you can do in order to improve your story, but with what I have read so far, I am simply mesmerised.

You have so much potential and I would like to see that potential realised. I wish you the best and I hope that you story receives the recognition that it deserves. My suggestion would be entering different contests in order to gain more reads and maybe also join a bookclub so more people hear about your book.

Thank you for requesting this review. It was an honour to review this amazing book and I wish you all the best.

Reviewed by: Lyssa