Title

The title 'All His Perfects' makes me feel a bit stupid because I'm struggling to understand what the title actually means, like what's the meaning or story behind it? It does sound like a title related to love though so I'm expecting there's going to be characters falling in love in this book.

I figure it'll be like the male character sees the person they've fallen in love with as perfect like they're the "one" for them but it does say perfect, which is plural, so what else does he find perfect? Or is he just referring to his life as perfect? It's a simple title and yet it has managed to confuse me so much already.

Cover

The book cover is actually decent. You've used a clear image of a couple looking into each other's eyes and all of that romantic stuff going on. I'm assuming that the image is related to the book so I'd say you've chosen a good image because it is suitable for a story that seems to be romanced-based so far.

The font used on the cover is a good choice because it's like one of them romantic fonts and this book most likely is related to love so it goes well my ideas of the plot. You've used white for the text which is good of course as it is visible and avoids any clashing with the background. I can't give you much feedback right now on the cover; I feel like the cover fits the story already.

Blurb

The blurb screamed at me "CLICHE BOOK" and I haven't even started reading yet. You've introduced three different characters: Ivy, Andrian and Liam. Now I'm no expert at love stories because I don't like romance much but I have a feeling this book will either involve a love triangle of some sort, an affair, or some other kind of messy relationship.

I mean there's two guys and one girl, there's bound to be some fight occuring over the girl. I would however ay you've done a good job with what is actually in the blurb, as you haven't poured out the whole story, but rather a synopsis. You've given about one sentence for each character which is good I guess but I feel like there is something missing from the blurb which could make me want to read this book.

First Chapter

The first chapter was a sore headache for me - that's me being kind by the way. The flashback/dream at the beginning interested me because I wanted to know what happened between Ivy and whomever the guy was that she had left. As I began reading, it felt like one of those girly, high school, love books and I didn't enjoy reading it.

Nothing interesting actually occurred in the first chapter that made me want to carry on reading. All that happened was two girls giggling over a boy and chatting to him and then of course the stereotypical girl, Emilie who thinks she's a total badass enters the scene. I'm going to be honest, I didn't enjoy reading the first chapter and it didn't make me want to continue reading either.

Some feedback would be to include some kind of event in the first chapter, such as maybe a fight between Sophie and Emilie or something that will keep the reader wanting more. I feel like you need to rewrite or reconsider changing the first chapter to make it a more solid start.

The first chapter in any book is what hooks a reader and makes them want more. This should be consistent throughout the rest of your book. I feel like your first chapter has not done that to me at all so I'm a bit hesitant to read the rest of the book, however, I'll have to in order to give an honest review for the book.

Plot/theme

I found it funny and weird that a teacher is called Mr Typewriter, but I'll give credit to you because I haven't read of a teacher with a name like that before. The plot felt like it was dragging on forever; every chapter was just very basic and nothing really interested me in them.

I mean, all that has actually happened in the 7 chapters I have read is that Ivy has been chatting/awkwardly flirting with Liam online, she gets jealous when she sees him with other girls but knows that he's a jerk, and then she attends a party and when something happens to her, Liam the hero steps in to save the day. Oh, and her and Liam probably made out in the end because she woke up in his shirt. I'll be honest, it was boring, very cliche and it needs a lot of improvement.

Some feedback would be to reconsider the plot or plan the story properly so you know what's going on. Expand on the points in each chapter and make it interesting, you need to make sure something funny or interesting occurs in every chapter to keep the reader wanting more. This will not only help you, but your audience too. Readers want to be pulled into your story and fully invested, especially in the first opening chapters.

Writing

Your writing is okay. You can construct simple sentences to keep the plot going, which is good, but there's a lot of room for improvement so I'm going to spill my bag of feedback to you now.

The first piece of feedback I will give is to make sure you use correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation. I say to all writers to check this over I'm their books, and I'm saying it to you as well because you're a new writer, and so you need to know the intricate details well. Having correct spelling, grammar, and punctuation does not only make it easier for the readers to read the book without getting put off, but it also allows you to pick up good habits early on, and improve as a writer whilst also exploring your own style.

My second piece of feedback would be to use different sentence starters and more descriptive language throughout your work. Using adjectives, adverbs, and so on will pique the reader's interest and give them a concrete idea of what you are trying to convey. This will also add a new flare to your work.

My third piece of advice would be for you to experiment with your writing and find your own unique writing style. This can take weeks, months, even years, but it's worth going through as it means you're finding yourself as a writer. Read other books to get an idea but try to avoid going down the cliche route as you want your book to be different and stand out.

Characters

I feel as though all your characters need major development as they're simply names at the moment and nothing more. You need to bring your characters alive and really step into their shoes when you're writing about them.

Some feedback would be to give each one of your characters - no matter how fleeting their appearance may be - an individual personality so they're all notably different. Include their emotions in the book and try to make them come across in your writing so we know how the characters are feeling, and what they're like. As a reader, I want to feel like I've known this character forever, that includes their thoughts and everything else about them.

Overall Impression

This book is not the best of reads at the moment, however, I can appreciate the fact that this is because the author is a new writer and this is their first book. There is a lot of room for development for this book and I'm hoping my feedback can help you improve your work. You'll probably be thinking that I'm talking a load of garbage, or that I'm being too harsh: my job is to provide the feedback, whether you take it or leave it is your choice.

My advice to you would be to take as much feedback/constructive criticism as possible as you're in early days with the book and you're a new writer so you can get a head-start and really make your book stand out from the crowd.

Reviewed by: Pixie