Moth Light

Author: theRavensWritingd3sk
Reviewer: -sylver

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SYNOPSIS

Eula Rose had always struggled when it came to her confidence and in a world where things are known to go bump in the night, it's good to know how to handle yourself.

Convinced by her friends to go out to the town's latest nightclub, Eula finds herself mingling with some of the city's most dangerous wildlife and catching the eye of something - someone - ancient. Someone who Eula knows screams 'danger,' although she cannot seem to tear herself away from this man, this beast, and her mind finds itself wandering back into the low lights and smoky booths night after night without knowing his name.

Although as Eula and her beast begin to burn for each other, the light shows the things lurking in the dark; watching them and waiting to sink tooth and claw into the delicate fluttering life that has wandered into their grasp. So she must decide as the flame burns brighter and threatens to consume them both:

Do you follow your head or your heart?

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1. TITLE

Review: As of now I don't think the title relates to the story, but there's only three chapters so I'm sure the hidden meaning will be implanted somewhere. I do love the title “Moth Light”, which is very unique and eye-catching. Matthias seems more like the moth and Eula the light.

2. COVER

Review: I love covers with a dark nature aesthetic so I find yours very pretty. It doesn't emphasize aspects of your story very much but it is nice to look at. The title, author's name, and subtitle were well-placed. I especially like the fonts and the moth symbol above the text.

3. BLURB

Review: The blurb is fabulous and straight to the point. You introduce Eula as a shy girl wanting to build her confidence, and that factor was seen from the very beginning. A very consistent character trait. The stakes of the story are whether she should follow her head or her heart, as unknown villainous forces might try to take root in Matthias’ and her relationship.

4. PLOT

Review: I absolutely loved all the details in chapter one. Everything I read was intriguing and on point. Even her friends when they were introduced sounded ethereally. They left quite the impression and were very memorable to me. You made the cliche of bumping into the assumed love interest seem very fresh, making me feel like it was my first time reading such a thing. I’m glad you didn't have her fantasizing over his features, as usually when you bump into someone, it's not your first take.

The “Humans were far too easy” comment from Matthias made me do a double take. I had thought that he was a human, and as a new reader made me reevaluate my assumptions about him. Matthias observing her longer made more sense after he explained that other humans liked to gush at him. That makes Eula seem like an oddball. I love Carnal. I think he has a great sense of humor.

I didn't understand why Matthias wanted someone to chase off Eula and her friends because they were attracting attention. That's the purpose of going to a club; to have fun and maybe meet new people. Poppy seems nice. I cackled at Poppy recognizing Matthias’ description but playing it off when Eula recalled who bumped into her causing her to spill her drink. The end of chapter three made me wonder if Matthias is a werewolf like Poppy or a vampire.

5. CHARACTERS

Review: All your characters are distinguishable and memorable. You don't dump them on the readers, but introduce them steadily. Eula is still a bit of a mystery to me. She does give off that she's an introverted girl trying to fit in, and I'm sure there's more to her than what meets the eye. Chloe is the fun bubbly friend that wants the best for everyone in her inner circle. I love how supportive she is for Eula. Trifena seems like the painfully honest friend you love-hate but appreciate. Matthias is a nice male lead. A little blunt but good and caring for the most part, and sounds like he's been through a lot. I'm wondering how he got most of his scars as there's an emphasis on his bodily scars. Poppy seems like the best friend to Matthias. The energetic person he needs at his side. Carnal is also witty like Poppy, and can't wait to see more on his character.

6. ORGANIZATION/STRUCTURE

Review: The organization is great. I'm a little iffy about the recap of Eula spilling her drink in Matthias’ perspective in chapter two. I personally think recaps in another person's POV are unnecessary and a little repetitive, but to hear his thought process about it was still very interesting and built upon his character traits. Other than that the transitions were good. Story was easy to follow.

7. GRAMMAR/DESCRIPTION

Review: No issues on the grammar and descriptions. All of your details were nicely put together. Characters and setting were very easy to imagine because of how vivid they were. You know how to show off your world very well.

8. WRITING STYLE/FLOW

Review: You have a great writing style. I’d say it caters to Young Adults/Adults. It has a sprinkle of purple prose in it, which is hauntingly beautiful to read in a dark fantasy story.

9. CREATIVITY/ORIGINALITY

Review: Not too sure where the story's headed but I like what I've read so far. It's very interesting and I can't wait to see what Eula and Matthias will face. From what I've taken in it's about vampires and werewolves. Matthias is definitely an ancient vampire. I'm wondering if his past will haunt him in the present.

10. PERSONAL ENJOYMENT

Review: I really enjoyed your story. I hope you continue to update eventually because you're an amazing author. You definitely have a hidden talent. Keep doing what you're doing, and I believe one day your talent will shine through the platform. I'm wishing Eula and Matthias an easy journey.