'Lovers have fallen' Book by JadeJones4

Cover: A very intriguing cover, I like that it doesn't give much away. 5 points.

Title: Simple and sweet, its gives readers an insight to the story. 10 points.

Summary/Blurb: It's very straight to the point. Sweetie I know a blurb is meant to be an actual summary but you don't really need to give everything away in the summary. I advice that you please take it back to the drawing board and work somethings out. If you state the goal of the book that simply, readers will read the summary and conclude the ending without actually getting to open the book. 6 points.

Plot: The way I see it, you know what your doing and you know where you want the story to go. The problem is that you are having a hard time in executing it. Sometimes it's best to imply what is being done or said without actually writting it down. Also its a very unique story line but take it down a notch, it looks rushed and very fast paced. 19 points.

Character development: If the plot isn't properly executed, it's hard to follow the character's on their individual journeys on this story. Now don't get me wrong; like I always say, I'm a sucker for details. There is more to a character than eye and hair colour. Their flaws, their likes and their personality as a whole has to fleshed out properly for the plot to look as realistic as it sounds. (Despite it being fictional😅) 14 points.

Style of writing: Third person and informal, sweetie you didn't do this writing style justice. I feel that you should read books that are written in the style you want. That way you'll have an idea and get the guidelines of how to execute the style perfectly. 5 points.

Grammar: I spotted mistakes ranging from misspelt words and wrong use if punctuation. 5 points.

Total: 64 points.

Now here's my advice♤

From where I'm standing, it looks like you already have everything covered. It just remains for you to execute it properly.

Being with the theme and genre of the novel have to move smoothly. Least I forget that your characters also affect how your genre will work well with your book.

Take in horror books as example, there is always an idiot so walks into danger proudly, or an over curious person whose actions are likely to kill every one in the end.

Also Dearie get an editor or take your time to edit your work, that way you will get and keep readers.

Have a nice day♤