'Fallen queen' book by Disha_2007

Cover: Well the cover is giving me anime vibes and from where I'm standing, unless your book is some what related to the fantasy genre then  it shouldn't look like anime🤔. Also I don't see how it relates with the story. 2 points.

Title: From what I have read so far, this is very suitable for the story. 10 points.

Summary/Blurb: It is spot on, the description is amazing although it is quite lenghty. I suggest cutting it down a bit, a blurb is meant to give a sneak peek but not the full story. 6 points.

Plot: For a young girl you have a good imagination. Although the plot does look depressing, I admire how you constructed it. You literally blew me away with this story line but it came crashing down when you started to info dump. Like I said earlier, we are all amateurs in this whole writting pazzaz and yes it will take you some time before you get a hang of it. Also I noticed that your introduction to other characters take up more time than necessary, try and cut it down a bit. 19 points.

Character development: They are obviously not going to be perfect but if you tell more than show their personality, it gets rather boring. 17 points.

Style of writting: It's first person and formal, a very bold choice but I'm not very familiar with this style, so I can't really tell you what you are doing wrong. 10 points.

Grammar: You have very good vocabulary but cut down on the huge words. It's a real turn off if readers have to look up a word in the dictionary many times before they can keep up with the story. 8 points.

Total:

Now here's my advice ♤

Honestly you are doing great but you just need to cut down on the descriptions, show more and tell less, draft the chapters properly so that it won't be too long.

And you can get someone like an Editor to guide you on the spots I have missed. I hope this was helpful and sorry it came late.

♤For my remaing participants.

You guys should please be patient with me🙏

I'm starting Uni on Sunday and I studying to become a Vet🦓. I already have my hands full and I'm not even in the class room yet. I won't be at my computer till December so for now the shop is close. I promise I will get you your reviews before the end of the year.

Have a nice day♤