'WHITE CHAOS' Book by Perksofbeingdiya

Cover: It is eye catching and helps us know that the story being told is about a girl. 5 points.

Title: Short and sweet but I would have thought it was going to revovle around the members of the band. Regardless its a good title that fits the story. 9 point.

Summary/Blurb: I know we all know that the point of writting a blurb or a good one at that, is to draw in readers. To me a Blurb has to give someone an insight to the book but not too much, it has to have a rhetorical question and of course make sense. Your blurb has me going all kinds of confuse, take it back to the drawing board and work on it. 5 points.

Plot: I love the fact that in your story, its the female who is the famous musician. Its a common trope where the famous one is the male but I like what you did here. Your first line and chapter were awesome but the rest of the book could use a little more tweaking. I get that the two main leads are bound to fall in love with each other in the end. Most of it has you telling and not showing. You showed some vital parts but the rest looks scattered and it looks rushed. 19 points.

Character development: The main issue with your characters is that you introduced too many of them at the same time. Since this is a book based on Indie characters, I'm not familiar with it. So therefore I couldn't follow along since most of them had similar names and they kept coming in like a tsunami. 10 points.

Style of writing: You earned brownie points here because you got everything down about first person style of writing. The only issue I see here is that the way you portrayed you main male character in the summary is not the same way you portrayed him when writing the book. 8 points.

Grammar: I only spotted one error, so you're all good. 9 points.

Total: 65 points.

Here's my advice♤

I love trying out new things and your book gave me the opportunity to try out a book based in India.

Kudos to the hard work you put into it, you've obviously had it mapped out since the chapters are in sync.

Just work on how you deploy characters, the only characters who's name should be mentioned is those that have an impact on the story. If they don't have much of an impact, I suggest you don't give them a name. That way you won't confuse the readers or yourself.

I know I'm always stressing this show and tell situation. When I'm done with the next four reviews, I deliver a few chapters where I cover what I've been saying since.

I think that's all and good job in being ballsy.

Have a nice day♤