'Prom Queen (gxg)' Book by  s0giia

Cover: It is blurry, but I can see two girls kissing with the title written in a glowing font. I suggest you make the picture clearer for your readers to see. 3 points.

Title: Short and sweet, but please remove the words in the brackets. It makes the title look wordy. You can tell your readers if the story is supporting the community by your tags and mentioning it before the first chapter. 6 points.

Summary/Blurb: It is interesting and explains the plot properly without giving too much away. 10 points.

Plot: It is easy to follow and understand. I honestly prefer Ivy to Camryn in their different P.O.V's and personalities. The pacing is steady and the word flow is good. You info dumped a lot, which made it tiring to read. I also liked the fact that you made the goal known at the beginning of the book. 19 points.

Character development: First off, you did a good job in introducing characters, but you didn't make them three dimensional. Starting from the IT girls, I honestly can't differentiate their personalities. They've got no quirks, and they all have too many things in common. Moving on to Ivy's mom and Camryn's dads; do they like their children or not? You kept shifting their views on them and I wasn't clear. Meanwhile, I liked how Ivy and Camryn developed, but you kept on telling their personalities instead of showing it. If Ivy is a bitch, it needs to be shown unless it makes it look as if Camryn is delusional. 15 points.

Style of writing: First person and informal. You nailed it. 10 points.

Grammar: I spotted misuse of punctuations, wordy paragraphs and wrong tenses. 5 points.

Total: 68 points

Sweetie, -from where I'm standing- it looks like you know your stuff in writing.

I suggest using Grammarly or ProWritingAid to help with the grammar. Please draft out your characters and focus more on showing their personalities instead of telling us.

Also, work on your paragraphs to avoid info dumping and allowing the words to flow properly. Also, dialogue tags start with lowercase letters and are best in the present tense.

Have a nice day.