'FOUND' Book by Lass_Sarcastic

Cover: I like the cover, especially the note underneath. 5 points.

Title: It is short and okay, it doesn't give much away which is good. 10 points.

Summary/Blurb: I'm gonna let you in on a little secret dearie, a pet peeve of mine is when writers say that they are not good in descriptions. I know not everyone has to be good at it; but when you write it there, it discourages people not to read it. I for one would not have read it, if I wasn't going to write a review about it. Please take that whole I don't know how to write nonsense down away from there. You can and will do better than that, just give it some time. 5 points.

Plot: From what I have seen, your story (Please correct me If am wrong), is based on a girl and her family. Her father supposedly died at sea while her brother got kidnapped. I hate to break it to you girly but the plot doesn't look tohave that much effort put into it. At first it looked like it was getting somewhere but the chapters were way too short; as for the rest which is the theme and the surroundings, I didn't get what you were trying to portray. It's an original idea I'll give you that, I agree I have not read a book that focuses on such a topic. I suggest you please map out your book, think about the themes and overall try and pitch what you are trying to sell to your readers. 17 points.

Character development: There are only four characters so far to the place I read to and they all lack the pizzaz (here I go again with this word),
that they are supposed to have. I know its fictional and they aren't real but it's nice to see how they grow and learn from their mistakes. 10 points.

Style of writting: You did well in the first person style of writting but you missed out some things, like the feelings of the person who is explaining the story. 5 points.

Grammar: Everyone has this problem, just clear your head and edit the paragraphs and punctuations, you'll be fine. 5 points.

Total: 57 points

Now here is my advice♤

I'm sorry if I ranted a bit, your book has potential. I can see it, anyone with a good head on their shoulders can see it. What we need is for you to see it.

First off please map out your book. I say this alot and I will keep saying it, its very important.

I like to see books as an escape of reality and there is always a goal to be met. Be it an achievement, or a relationship or even a place to go to; its always there. I can find that in your book and that's what keeps someone to keep reading. The way you tried to put it doesn't make it seem important.

Readers even though they might not care about the book or the Author, they obviously see that you know where you are taking this story and they would want to see how you execute it.

Every first makes or breaks your book, be it the line, paragraph or even chapter. They are very important, they are one of the reasons why books gain or lose readers.

Style of writting and character development is another important factor. You have to bring your A game to the table when it comes to this. And if you don't know how to go about it, simply read books under the genre you are writting, you can Google it or ask someone to help you.

I've noticed that certain characters are needed in certain genres, for example most horror books have the inquisitive character who almost gets everyone killed at the end. Or romance books have meddling friends and or mothers. Just like that but there are some exceptions like comedy reliefs and child representations but you can read that up in your free time.

As for anything else, that I missed just take it all back to the drawing board and sleep on it. It'll all make sense when you've thought it all out.

Have a nice day♤

'Every one is different and if you want to be the one who is the common ground between them, then you have to go the extra mile.'- THEO