'The Villainess Wants To Live To The Fullest.' Book by starlynx96

Cover: It is very beautiful and gives me the vibe that this is a fantasy novel. Although you could enhance her eyes a bit more, since they play a vital role in the story. 4 points.

Title: It is very long. Suppose one of your readers loved the book and would want to share it, the longer the legnth of the title the easier it is to forget it. Don't get me wrong, the title does justice to the book I advice that you make it shorter. 5 points.

Summary/Blurb: I think that we  both know that the main point of a summary is to summarize the book. (See what I did there?) The summary was going great till you gave a mini speech on how people should please check out your book. The job of the summary is to get people to check it out. Writing a speech there is a turn off, I personally have a pet peeve with this. Please take it down and leave the upper part there, where the actually summary is and I bet that you would get more readers. 6 points.

Plot: Colour me in impressed. I love how you gave a run down of what is going on. You didn't info dump, I thought you would. Your chapters are in sync and have dept. The only problem I see is that it looks rushed. There are somethings that need more explanation, I know suspense is the key to keep readers but some things need to be known. Overall I think you did a good job at mapping it out and presenting it. 21 points.

Character development: As the plot goes on, your characters are meant to grow with it. This is the part where your showing skills come to life. I noticed that your main female character, had a former life before being reincaranated. I get that she is supposed to be different but please let her actions speak for her, not her thoughts or words. The same goes for the other characters. Also I like how none of the side characters are there to make the main one look good. 19 points.

Style of writting: I noticed you tend to switch from first person to third person. This gets confusing after a while, so I suggest putting a heads up above the chapter. Aside from that they were written well. 8 points.

Grammar: Sweetie sit your sweet ass down and edit your book. Especially the punctuations and spellings, remember what I said that one punctuation can emphasised better than two. 5 points.

Total: 68 points.

Now here's my advice♤

First up, I want to say thank you for giving me the chance to read your book. It's truly one of a kind, (mostly because I have not read anything like it before...hehe).

I think that you have every thing mapped out, you know what you are doing and where you are taking the story to.

The showing is as much as the telling which is good but I feel it needs a little pizzaz.

Also the dialogue could use some work as well as the time jumping. A dialogue can be used to give away hidden clues or be used as a way for readers to view the characters in a different light. As for time jumping, it should either be used seldomly or not all. There's a particular element on how to do it and I feel that your book works better in the moment.

You need to find a balance between dialogue, description of actions, thoughts and places. I see you tend to scatter it a bit which is how it is meant to be, but please make it look neater.

Just improve a few things and you will be just fine.

Remember to enjoy yourself while writing, because what's the point of doing a hobby if you don't enjoy it?

'There are many ways to kill a Rat but the goal is still the same.' -THEO

Have a nice day♤